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PaK-RaT · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 10:08 pm

hey guys, i think ive finished my charatcer, i would like u guys to take a good look and gimmie yer crit guys...i need to finalize him before Oct 1st...
Thx...

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Seph|roth · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 10:15 pm

nice sketches, nice cartoony look !
I like em

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- Seph -
Listen Without Prejudice

Rob M · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 10:17 pm

Looks good to me, whats it for?

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PaK-RaT · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 10:30 pm

thx guys...
He's gunna be the star of my final portfolio animation. I noticed that some of the poses dont have glasses...BUT the red series is su[pposed to be a sequence from elft to right...and there's a REASON he doesnt have lasses there...anyone notice anything else i should do to make him better? I want some constructive critisim

shahar2k · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 10:32 pm

I dunno if it goes with the charecter, but braces?
right now he REALLY reminds me of this old cartoon show.... can't remember the name, it involved this black kid, and an angel, and was VERY stupid, I think it was pre scuby doo

Rob M · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2000 11:01 pm

Well, It looks great but now that I think about it one thing seems out of place.

In the second grey pose where he faces left, his check seems odd. I don't really know how to describe, it but it seems like it's coming out from the side of his face about 6".

Other than that it's great. You just might want to be careful with that cheek on side shots. Maybe make the check line less distinguished so it blends better?

Thats just my take on it. Good luck with your animation.

Chapel · member Member # Joined: 18 Mar 2000 Posts: 1930

Looks pretty neat Pak-rat. Reminds me of one of the characters from that cartoon "The Babysitter". (I think that is the name) Anyway, I think you should try and keep the teeth a little more simple instead of drawing them in. Only do that on close ups. Also, there does seem to be a little inconsistency from pose to pose. You may want to set up a templet before you start so you can see your character from all angles. This is an excerpt from Scott McDaniel's page.

McDaniel's website is: http://members.aol.com/ScottAMcD/index.html

PaK-RaT · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 9:15 am

incosistancies..yes, now we're on the right track, elaborate, i want some spacifics...like, stuff u guys reccomend i fix u know?

Chapel · member Member # Joined: 18 Mar 2000 Posts: 1930

Well for example.. his sideburns change length every other pose. Some of the poses he has lips and others he doesn't. The picture of his back shows his hair being long and wide in the back while all of the side shots display it as a tight hair cut. Also, his sleeves change too, but that is minor. That picture I posted in my previous post was what some artist do to keep the consistancy. You draw it from every side using the lines as guidelines, so when you reproduce the character in different poses you can tell where everything goes easier. Make sense?

PaK-RaT · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 10:06 am

wow, yer right, the sideburns DO change, as does the back hair...good call guys! yeah all that makes sense....

i think you have an excellent idea there, with the markers yer speaking of, im going to do that. thx

anyone else have some comments about other stuff they think i should check out? other inconsitancies? which are the stongest poses? What kind of boy would u say he was...if u had to describe him

Nomadik · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 10:19 am

Haha... Thats the Gary Coleman Cartoon.. Ech!!
-Jesse

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Originally posted by shahar2k:
I dunno if it goes with the charecter, but braces?
right now he REALLY reminds me of this old cartoon show.... can't remember the name, it involved this black kid, and an angel, and was VERY stupid, I think it was pre scuby doo

Bizarde · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 10:26 am

will be not easy what u want to do,this kind of caracters need very good animation!!!
but here is my help...=)

good luck...=)

~bizarde.

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synj · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 11:09 pm

I agree with Chapel, I saw alot of inconsistancies off the bat.

In a few poses the way the hair comes up in the front changes and it bugs me. Also, not only do the sideburns change length but in one particular pose they go behind his ear. He also appears to be gaining/losing weight from pose to pose. I don't know what this is for so my suggestions are really limited eheh

bizarde: good show, man!

-synj www.synj.net

PaK-RaT · Posted: Wed Sep 20, 2000 11:58 pm

wow guys, nice to come home and to see everyone gave me great feedback.

bizarde: im really impressed with what u did with my charatcer...it will point me inna new direction, thx.

Synj: thx for giving me more ammo to atack the char with...noticing the inconsistancies is very difficult fior me to do since ive been married to this char design for like 2 weeks.

before i bug u guys anymore for crits im going to try out what u guys suggest...thx for all the help..gotta love this forum, i get the advice and constructive feedback i need everytime thx *PaK bows*