[med]

Ahoy Sijun

I am participating in DWIV, a huge online art competition with contestants from all over the world. The due date is the 18th, and I think I am almost done. I wanted to post my final illustration to get some feed back. I would have posted it within the WIP thread but I figured any more work added would just be finishing touches.

Each contestant has to pick a race (Norms, Demons, or Machines.) Then a character must be designed etc...so I chose machines. I designed a Cyborg chick thing. I think it's looking the way I wanted it to, but constructive criticism is always welcome. Let me know of your thoughts! Thanks ahead of time

(Cyborg "Aes Keriya")

[raybender]

hey med.. great work. i like it really much..the overall impression is very good.

i would like to point you to two things which draw my attention in a negative way:
1. the butt section looks a bit rushed, compared to the oher parts.. i guess its mainly becaue of this light blue ellipse within the middle.

2. the background on the top left corner.. hmm hard to explain with my poor english, but i try.. i think it looks like you painted it with strong contrasts and colors and then put a layer of fog over it.. i think its good to do that to keep the attention on the main character, but theres something about the values which make it look washed out, instead of far away. dont know how to describe it better.

beside that it looks great. all the best for the challenge!

Alex.

[Synnical]

woo, cool pic!

I'll cut straight to the chase on the improvements that can be made. First of all, as raybender has already pointed out, the background, especially the sky, appears very washed-out. I know you are trying to create a sense of depth here, but first you need something of higher contrast to allow the eye to fall on. I see there's three points of interest in this image, the demon in the background, the cyborg, , and the space that's below the cyborg. if you want to draw attention to these areas, the sky in the top right corner needs to be further in the darks.

Construction wise, there are some anatomical issues with the cyborg. Judging from the way her torso is arching backwards (this is from the position of HER left breast), the stomach would be less visible. Also the hip joint area needs more work so it appears more dimensional. Her left arm is really long for some reason, though I am not sure if that was the intention.

Overall I just think you need more darker areas to flush out the image better. Worry less about what each individual light source is doing in the scene and instead focus on how to make the overall picture read better. I hope the overpaint helps, and good luck!

[Naeem]

hey med
i love it. However, I can't tell if those wires going back into the ground are part of the cyborg or not. It seems like they're REALLY far away, but then they seem connected to her because of the value change. I looked hard at it and I think that it's something else in the distance that's attaching itself to the cyborg. If that's the case, then you need more contrast behind the cyborg's body up top near the head.
If it is part of the cyborg, then I'd say that its a big atmospheric perspective issue.
I also can't tell the scale of the cyborg. To me, it looks like the cyborg is probably a few hundred feet tall? Or maybe thousands of feet?
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[med]

Hey guys! Thanks so much for all your input, I recently had the chance to get back on a computer. I will take in all your advice, and I appreciate all your opinions, they are really going to help I will get back to this later, gotta get back to work!