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PirkkaH
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 3:16 pm     Reply with quote


Hi,

Here's my recent image which I've done about two months ago, but dared to publish just now, in here. Maybe later on somewhere else too.

This image is actually a main work from my personal long term project, which i've been doing lately. Hopefully I will manage to get this job done soon.
The project is to illustrate some points of a story, which is on view below these paragraphs. All right, maybe that was all of description about the image and I wish you like it. Smile



The Story idealized by me and scripted by my friend:
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I remember those times
When I was at the top
Bathing in success

I might have some kind of a tendency
For reckless life, drugs and women

Hell,
I was so addicted to the fast life
It felt like, I was invincible
Nothing could stop me then

Those days,
I did jobs as an extra muscle
And it was easy money

But things don't always go as planned

The main hit,
That was a breeze
Maybe it was all the drugs
Maybe it was just a coincidence
But it had fatal consequences

The only friend I ever trusted
Was caught in a rain of hot metal
I was so close I could feel the bullets fly by my head

But I made it out that day
Sometimes life changes unexpectedly
I reminisce on those days while I meditate

And then I'm ready again
To let these bastards taste the own medicine
Of depleted uranium
From my fully automatic AR-15

So you're welcome to come, and try to get me!

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~edit 24-05-08~ I made some changes on picture.
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Naeem
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 5:58 pm     Reply with quote
there are some minor things i'd change, but overall, i really like the painting after i read the little script
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the_insider
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PostPosted: Sun Jan 06, 2008 2:36 pm     Reply with quote
there's an aweful lot of blur...i like it in the background...but maybe not so much in the foreground figures
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 6:46 am     Reply with quote
yeaa nice fat city, blur look very wet ,like weather in this pic. very nice effect
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 9:26 pm     Reply with quote
nice job man
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Affected
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 17, 2008 10:30 am     Reply with quote
That's great, especially the story. I wish we had more stories to go with the images aroun d these parts!!

Some crits:
The guns aren't quite aggressive enough. I think they need to be bigger. Also some bionics on the characters would be cool, an eye implant, or maybe a gun implant. I think more blood would make the pain come through better. And I can't see the main character's face. It'd be easier to relate to him if we could see his eyes. Put a grimace in, maybe? Lastly, maybe push the contrast more, to make the image more dynamic yet.

I'm getting a real strong Blade Runner vibe here, too, that's awesome! Both thumbs up! Btw, what's that personal project of yours about? I totally love this pic, so I'd like to seem some more stuff in that vein!
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kochun
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 1:04 pm     Reply with quote
Love the Blade Runner feeling too, and I kinda agreed with Affected's idea of giving the main character in foreground more of a facial expression that is more obvious.

Like the vibe though..

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PirkkaH
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 7:43 am     Reply with quote
Hi,

Thanks for crits and comments. Time to explain a bit.

I understand if that blurriness might be a little distracting, . As you can know, when human goes in panic or fight mode his sight goes in tunnel vision and can't really much see what's happening around his flanks, but when trying to express that adrenalin rush, then a radial blur would be the best way to show up it.

Affected, kochun: Yeah, it propably would be better if face could be more shown, and at first I painted the face more frontal, but somehow I didn't manage to get good looking, it actually looked so fucking gay, that I had to compromized with it and put that face in more profile position. It would be better, but I'm not gonna change that anymore. Sorry guys. Smile

Then what comes with the bionics and bigger guns - I'll have to still ask why? Did bionic woman had clearly obvious that she had tons of tech inside her body. How about in I, Robot or other cybernetic guys in any movie like Blade Runner's androids or in Alien, was it obvious that they were geared up with cybernetics or implants? No they were hidden, because they could have the advance for looking much less than they really were, you know Wink
Bigger guns... no no no, then those guys would look like grunts with no intelligence Wink - and there's a one guy with a big .50 cal sniper rifle!! Very Happy

That kind of explaining, but I appreciate a lot your comments and you're right in some points

(...to mention: I really suck in english, but I'm learning!!)
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