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Martin Rebas
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PostPosted: Mon May 14, 2007 4:41 am     Reply with quote
Here's my attempt at drawing Dark Phoenix. I want harsh criticism and suggestions for improvements. Pretty please?



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PostPosted: Mon May 14, 2007 8:02 am     Reply with quote
I won't help You much cause I simply love it! Embarassed
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2007 11:02 am     Reply with quote
good work!

as for cirticism, I find her hands and feet a bit too small comparing to the head porportion. Also her right hand is sort of 'just there', instead of having a purposeful gesture to it, especially comparing to the clinched fist of the left hand.
As for the background, I find it bit boring, maingly because the contrasting black and white, with little colours in between. perhaps throwing in some sutble colours in the white behind her to spice it up.
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2007 12:19 pm     Reply with quote
Good job on this...

One question, and please don't see this as an attack- I don't mean it to be an indictment of your artistic integrity or anything of the sort, but did you trace all or parts of this from a photo and or work very closely from photo ref?

Whether you did or not, modern comic character tend to benefit from having their anatomy a little more clearly deliniated. I know it's a fairly non muscular female character, but still, she could look trim with a strong application of oppositional (ie- not bracketed)curve accentuation in the right places (breasts hips thighes calves arms...heh, so everywhere).

Asian comic illustration may not be your bag, but I'm providing the image as an example of a this; a lean character that, never the less has fairly clean anotomical articulation and oppositional flow. Your anatomy is pretty accurate the way it is, but it looks kinda... normal. I guess I'm trying to say the anatomy could use more drama.
http://accel96.mettre-put-idata.over-blog.com/0/16/61/51/trefle/hyung-tae-kim-oxide2-cartanuminous2.jpg

Edit... her left arm is the best example of what I'm talking about in the HTK image.
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2007 2:53 pm     Reply with quote
Thank you for the criticism! It's not traced (although her left hand is based on a photo of my own hand), but I think I often spend too much time trying to make everything anatomically correct and too little time on creating movement and drama.
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PostPosted: Wed May 16, 2007 9:57 pm     Reply with quote
Old school hell yeah! I like it, but she could look a little less "Hi I got powers!" and a little more "I just destroyed a world with 5 billion people and you're next."
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 6:48 pm     Reply with quote
I think it looks great!

advice handed down to me. Always draw your women Hot!
especially pin ups.
I understand what your going for (stoic, all powerful,emotions put aside)but take a look at gallery sites with the hits posted. (comicartfans.com,sketchbook) great drawings, but the ones that convey passion, full mouths, flowing hair. get three times more hits. that's what you want right?
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