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gLitterbug · Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 4:22 am

Hehe, very nice. I didn't know what to expect with the title, but this was a really funny surprise. I love Izzy's (I assume Izzy is the white small dog) innocent look. The photo of him on the wall is a great touch. I also like how mum is totally pissed off.

Some crits, hope you actually want them. Dad's jaw is bothering me a bit, maybe it is because the area between upper lip and lower is a straight line, or could be that it is just too wide open in general and looks dislocated. Also his body looks a bit too big. Looks a bit like he got a hunchback, also the violet coloration you got in there is a bit distracting. His hand pose looks a bit weird too, I�m not sure but it might look totally ok with a pointed finger instead.
No crits on the rest of the family except that mums square jaw makes her look a bit masculine and the body looks a bit big also, because the curve just below the breast sweeps out again. If you would've just made it continue like its the breast, it�d look more natural.
Last crit is that the background where the dog stands looks a bit bland due to the flat colors, but I think that might be solved by making the floor a more redish color so theres a bit more contrast to the wall, or maybe even just do something with the edge between wall and floor.

I hope my crits don't sound crushing, it's a very nice image and well done. Composition works great too in my opinion. In case I came off as nitpicking too much, just ignore my brainfarts Wink

Tinusch · Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 5:56 pm

Glitterbug, thanks for the awesome crits again, they're always spot on. Went with all your suggestions minus those on the dad, I felt his expression really conveys his irritation and the finger is thusly pointed as if he's commanding the dog to get down. Otherwise, though, I fixed mom's breast and jaw, changed the floor in the back, toned down the purple on dad's back, and finished the edge of the table that I had forgotten about. Thanks again

Feefie04 · junior member Member # Joined: 03 Nov 2004 Posts: 14

Tinusch · Posted: Thu Feb 02, 2006 1:48 pm

Thanks a lot feefie, your comments were great too. Glad you chimed in about dad's mouth, apparently it was more of an issue than I thought, I think it looks much better now. And the swinging lamp was another good touch. I think I'm calling this one finished, gotta get it printed this week. Thanks again

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