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RobG · Posted: Tue May 03, 2005 1:31 am

UPDATE AT BOTTOM!!

hi heres a new pic,

yeah anyway im going for a more cozy feel this time Smile

please feel free to contribute any crits and comments you have Very Happy

kitty!

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RobG · Posted: Wed May 04, 2005 12:13 am

yeah...thanks for the help Evil or Very Mad

yar anyway heres a newun.

lot of feeling in this one *feels

crits and comments PLEASE!!

fly!...H.M.S Whale!

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Sumaleth · Posted: Wed May 04, 2005 1:24 am

I like them.
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RobG · Posted: Wed May 04, 2005 9:02 am

thanks!

please could you tell me why? is there anything you dont like? got any suggestions?

3 word replies cant elaborate much about anyones work. Confused

its like everyones got verbal minimalism
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Matthew · Posted: Wed May 04, 2005 9:28 am

To me that second one works better than the first one. Both of them are very unbalanced so a suggestion would be to experiment more with the composition in them. For eg in the whale, maybe show the whole whale or open up the space to the left of him and make the ground visible.

Critique is hard though and it all depends on where you want to take your pictures aswell. What do you feel that it is which is not working in your pictures? What changes do you feel you need? I believe the best way to approach is to be as self-critical as you can be.
The whale is very nicely rendered and the clouds are very original, my favourite of the two.

You shouldn't neglect an answer given to you though, you can't force people to give you criticism.
ok I hope u are ok with this comment.
have a nice day

Heysoos · Posted: Wed May 04, 2005 10:41 am

I think theyre both good. both look like illustrations for a children's book. I dig the shadows cast by the claws in the first one, nice touch. Theres nothing wrong with the composition or anything that I can see, but like matthew said you might try playing around to make them even more dramatic.
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eyewoo · Posted: Thu May 05, 2005 4:25 am

Very well suited for a children's book... My only crit has to do with the clouds in the whale picture. They do not look fluffy -- more like heavy cookie dough.

The cat is wonderful!
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RobG · Posted: Thu May 05, 2005 7:13 am

thanks alot everyone Very Happy

hmm childrens book?

im FAR too secretly macabre to do nice pictures lol.

yes true the clouds are very dense i was going for a more marshmellowy feel i guess hee.

i think i wil play around with the compositions later Very Happy

thank you people.
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DeadbeaT · Posted: Fri May 06, 2005 2:02 am

I love the first one! but you should work a bit on the ground and the background of it, the clouds allmost seem like a solid wall there, perhaps make it more misty, less cloudy? the second one is nice too but theh first one catched me
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noxi · Posted: Fri May 06, 2005 2:19 am

Yes, you got a great style! The pics are cute and eerie at the same time. I like your ideas, especially the whale! Very neat! I don�t know what you�re trying to say with it, but I like it very much. A print of that would be great for closer look. The other one is also very strange (in a good way), there�s just have to be something deep inside it. Some kind of huge animal looking at one glowing cross... I wonder what that means. Interesting pics definetly!

Oh, the mood is also very good in the huge animal pic.