[Heysoos]

This painting isn't quite done, but I wanted to get some feedback and see where I need to work on it the most, and where I should completely change things. Thanks.

size: 30"x40"


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[Naeem]

its beautiful so far!
just one crit. it looks a bit 'abstract'.. if u're going for that look, great. right now, its in the middle. so might wanna detail it just a bit and it'll be perfect .

[gLitterbug]

It looks quite nice, but I have to admit that I�m kind of lost looking at it in parts.

[jinnseng]

It's not bad, but its hard to tell what you're going for. It kind of looks like some kind of forest scene, but it's just not clear enough to tell. Maybe you could explain to us what this picture is suppose to be?

[Heysoos]

hmmm, good question. Basically, I wanted to capture the essence of a place without it being so much a depiction of a specific place....if that makes any sense. This painting fits in a line of work where I've been trying to explore the idea of expressing a frame of mind through the language of landscape. Its kinda like the merging of ones mind and emotions with nature I suppose. Heres some previous samples in this line to maybe help make more sense (or less).
The Black House
The Grey House
Wrath
Ruins

In the Blackhouse, things are much more clearly laid out, but it seems maybe too clear in a way. More like an illustration of a specific setting. In The Grey House and Wrath I tried to make things more vague and just capture more of the raw mood. In this one my initial idea was to be more vague and have more of a bare emotion than a setting but as I worked on it it seemed to want to be more refined and detailed. Right now its kinda half way in the middle which probably isn't good and should be made either more abstract or more refined.

Hopefully people won't think I'm TOO full of shit after reading that
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[Matthew]

wuw Heysoos really neat works you got there, I wish I could paint like you.

I really like the above painting as it is but as you wanted tips. Mostly I am thinking compositionally for this one and that would be to add light to the left and some more shadow in the bottom foliage bushes, hmm maybe I am thinking too much landscape here and it may be not what you are looking for. A quick overpaint to show what I mean:


Ruins is a Master piece I tell you, keep up the good work.

[Heysoos]

ooo, nice overpaint mathew, that idea helps a lot I think.
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[watmough]

awesome,heysoos!
very Turnery,i like it very much.

[TemplaStormX]

[noxi]

veeery nice. reminds me very much of Turner. allways nice to see pics influencd by romantic era things. me likey alot!

[Diruo]

*love*

[Pringle]

Very nice.
I don't mind that it looks a bit abstract. It gives the viewer room to let
the image grow in the imagination.

And if you stand back from the monitor it all settles down nicely.
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[Heysoos]

Thanks a lot for the comments everyone. I appreciate it greatly. Yeah, I am definitely heavily influenced by the likes of Turner. I tried to take some of the advice i've been getting, Heres an update:



(I had a bit of a glare problem taking the photo which I tried to fix up in photoshop, so some of the colors and such might be a tad bit wonky)
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[Matthew]

oh yea this is a lot better.

There is one thing though and I might sound tacky or something and maybe it is the glow u mentioned above causeing it. There is a small part taking a lot of attention, it is to me anyway so others may think differently.
The left part has a small part being bright, I guess it could be like that in the reality, clouds or similar, but mostly I am thinking what is the best for the paintings nowadays so I made you a quick fix, look beneath.
First pic show you the area I am talking about and the second pic is without the glow part.

This is a picky crit but since you wanted comments I thought I could tell you this too, otherwise with the painting I wouldn't change anything. I really like the parts to the right and how you solved some areas aound the rowing- boat and such. Mucho nice painting this. Keep up the good work.





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[Heysoos]

thanks matthew, good eye.

heres some detail shots and some angled shots where I tried to show the texture of the surface. I experimented a bit with this one by mixing some pebbley sand with thick gesso when preparing the canvas.





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[the_insider]

awesome texture...there isn't much left to say other than opinions...i love your strokes...good variation in your latest updates...too much of anything is bad
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[Naeem]

hey heysoos
just wanted to say that you're an awesome oil painter. good improvements on the latest! you're doing great! keep it up

[Heysoos]

Thanks a lot annisahmad and the-insider.
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[CwStone]

whats really cool about this and your other paintings is that at first you dont really know what it is your looking at, but as you look at it more little details and distinguishable objects trickle into view (i.e the boat), until finally u r left looking at a picture in which you can easily identify the setting and what goin on. Atleast thats how it was with me.
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[Misc]

I like this alot, especially the colors, harmonic and nice. Something I'd have on my wall if I owned a house