[FaBoU]

Hi all,

I am new here, I allows itself to show you my first work in 2d.

I begin and would like to go far in field.
Thank you for criticisms constructive and different.



I am sorry for my English, I am Belgian and am not yet very buddies with this languages.
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Fabian Hardy

[Naeem]

hey fabou!
welcome.
i like the idea in your painting. If I may offer a few crits;
first, never use complete grays or whites in a color painting. if you import an image into photoshop or something, and check it, things may go toward a gray, but are never too close to being completely gray, black, or white.
instead of pushing it on the gray side, why not push it on the color side ? it makes the image a lot more interesting .
keep it up

[Twitch]

Hey FaBoU,

For a first 2D work i think you've got a pretty good start, I have to agree with annisahmad, the concept of your work is great, but the grays seem to really dull down the image (of course if thats the look you were going for, you've achieved it!)

But if i may i have a few more crits mostly on technical issues, that really for a first work aren't all that big of a deal but certainly something to consider in the future.

First, The light coming forth through the window, you've done a pretty good job at illustrating this, in the sense that anybody viewing the image knows exactly what your intention was. However, if you actually look at light as it flows through a window, it follows a very direct, uniform pattern, rather than in the random pattern you have in your work. This means that the light you have filtering through the air would hold true to the pattern of your window, definitly a hard effect to capture accuratly, but with some practice i'm sure you can do it.

In continuing with light, the light reflecting off your floor, that shows the pattern of your windows has one to many columns. Your window on the wall shows 4 squares by 4 squares, on the floor its 5 squares by 4.

And one final comment, you done a good job of anchoring the figure in to your image with the shadow, great job with that, but there is one thing that makes your figure a little confusing. With that bright of light coming from behind, its unlikely that you would be able to see that much detail or color on the figure, it would be more towards a sillhouette, not completly black and detailess at that angle mind you, but somewhere in the middle of what you've drawn and a complete black sillhouette. Also the figure would have some highlights on his shoulders and the top of his head.

So yeah like i said you're off to a great start, just some technical considerations for your future works... i look forward to seeing your progress, keep posting!
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"less is more" - Mies Van Der Rohe

[Freebooter]

Hi FaBou. First of all, congrats on picking up the fine hobby of drawing. Then onto the point: you really must have a wacom to work outside vector art properly. They're costing about 100 euros and are available at specialized computer stores.

cheers and keep it going!