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judson
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 2:46 pm     Reply with quote
C&c are wellcomes.

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Max_Dark
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 2:56 pm     Reply with quote
Excellent piece, if I had to name anything that's bothering me it's the somewhat simple boots he's wearing. They seem so 2d. Nice focus on the action, nice colors Smile
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judson
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 3:16 pm     Reply with quote
Thanx Embarassed
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1500miles
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 10, 2005 3:18 pm     Reply with quote
What stood out to me was the ice around the shark. Where it's (somewhat violently, I'm guessing) breaking apart, the ice seems...soft, almost. It has an almost rubberish appearance. I don't think it's completely necessary to fix it, it just stood out to me.
Otherwise, I really love it. The colors and mood and everything are really great.
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 12, 2005 3:41 pm     Reply with quote
Here is some C&C, hope you can use it.
Nice colors but to me the image seem kind of strange. First of all the storytelling - why is he hunting a shark in the middle of a sea of ice (or in the middle of land) and why is the shark attacking. It needs an explanation for this - he could be lost on a piece of ice, hunting in a canoe with a huge chunk of meat hanging from a wire, etc.
The composition could need some tweaking as well. It's a dramatic situation; why not frame it a bit closer and twist the angle of the horizon. The two "characters" are kind of stuck in the middle of the picture, they could be levelled a bit more. You could also make his pose a bit more wild (he is being attacked by a quite large shark). Perhaps you could also lose some of the mountains on the left and make it look like the ocean. Hope it helps.
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judson
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 12, 2005 5:13 pm     Reply with quote
Thanx to both.

I must learn about perspective and composition, respect the storytelling I dont have explanations, I only draw an idea...

I must learn englis too excuse me Confused Crying or Very sad
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