[noxi]

Hello Sijun masters,

Any c&c of this pic would be great. I got inspired very much by looking adi granovs pics. right after checking snygg�s and ceenda�s sites, i just had to grab my wacom and start practicing.

The pic is here:
http://personal.inet.fi/clan/grottoart/pics/dancing_girl.html

and some process pics are here:
http://personal.inet.fi/clan/grottoart/pics/nainteettanssivanmuijan.jpg
(as you can see i really didn�t know what i was doing. ) I used about ten reference photos and drawings, mostly googled.

Any tips would be just perfect!

[faeklone]

Alright, my only question with the picture is how do we know that she is dancing without the Title. The pose is one that has little to no movement in it when we assosciate movement with dancing. Also if she were dancing I would expect her arms to be higher, more likely above shouler level than not. I may be somewhat biased, but whenever I see women dancing, they always seem to have the most interesting movements to their arms. Most of their dancing is done by their arms. And please, stop her from pointing unless you want her to be pointing at something.

Anatomy wise, at the moment all I have to bug you about is the fact that the right side of her torso has been ended too soon. bring it out a bit more, maybe half the thinkness of the shadow bhind her at that point. Make it a line that's nearly straight, but curves just slightly into her stomach area.

Last of all is the little attention that seems put into the background. The light source is there to light her however it is doing a poor job of that. YOu can put those in for light, however I believe that you need to fix up the light hitting your subject a bit to pull it off better. Also figure out in terms of 3 dimentions where your subject is and where the light is. The reason I say that little attention seems to have been paid to the background deals with the lighting, but it also deals with how the background feels like a walls, stopping any feeling of movement by your figure in it's tracks. You don't dance by walls, you dance out in the open. You ahve to have room to move. However the texture of the wall was done really well. TO bad it affect the piece in that way.

Anyway, the just of the crit, make it seem more like there's movement present and it will help the piece work out better.
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[Affected]

The nose casts a strong shadow to one side but many parts of the face look like they're lit from the front. This flattens the face. The overexposure isn't necessarely working either.

I really like how the right hand looks.