[Herman]

Hey guys, been a long time since I posted here. Haven't been doing any art that fits these boards Anyway, i started out with this illustrator piece last night and I'm kinda stuck. I think it lacks action, and it doesnt feel dynamic enough to give you the 'smack-in-the-face'-feeling I want. Any tips on how I can improve this?

The link:
http://loaded.swecon.org/fighters3.jpg
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[Behemoth2029]

Maybe some bullet trails and alot more smoke would help. You could also bring the nearest plane even further towards the spectator.

[Herman]

Update

Remade the planes, the pic has changed alot and I like it, what do you think?


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[gLitterbug]

I like that version alot more. The yellow gives it more life and it�s much more interesting to look at now. Cool style, I hope you post more illustrator stuff soon.

[SekiRyuu]

cool....spitfire and ME-109 right?

anywho....yeah, a lil more smoke coming for the ME109 would be better, and some spinning props too
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[Novacaptain]

the smoke looks a little too dense...almost liks some oil leak or something... I think that when people say smoke they mean a long trail of it. By the time you have flames like that the trail of smoke would probably pretty long i imagine. Perhaps you could try repositioning the planes a little more and find some arrangement that makes use of your space better? nice work.
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