Sijun Forums :: View topic - Sci-fi webcomic art c&c appreciated

Philip Zeplin · Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2003 2:46 pm

Hi there... first off let me say that this is not MY drawings, it is the drawings of a friend I am doing a webcomic with over at http://www.evolution2023.com

I thought I would post some of the pages to get some good c&c on it to help him improve (though I think he is doing a bangup job)

The Cover
http://www.mental-distortions.com/evo2023/pages/091403-18216.jpg

Page 1
http://www.mental-distortions.com/evo2023/pages/091603-162968.jpg

Two character sketches
The bad guy
http://www.mental-distortions.com/evo2023/gallery/chara-des-02.jpg
The hero
http://www.mental-distortions.com/evo2023/gallery/ramiro-sketch1.jpg

Its a cyberpunk murder mystery kind thing, set in 2023.

And crits would be nice! Smile

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Coldbook · Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2003 3:05 pm

Hey ya, as always feel free to kick me in the teeth.

These are some very good drawings. Like the clean manga style.

Maybe look at the perspective on the eyes when the head is turned 3 quarters of the way. And possible a little more emotion on the faces. Then agian i can't Really say that beause i've only seen one page. Also take care with the arm to chest (torso) ratio, especially that guy in the last frame of page 1. I'd like to see more posts from the comic. Great work on the whole Very Happy

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Philip Zeplin · Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2003 3:26 pm

Thanks for your comments!!! I'll pass em on!

All the panels for the story can be found here:
http://www.evolution2023.com

I didn't bother posting every pic, since it would be easier to just give that link if anyone asked.
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Capt. Fred · Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2003 12:13 am

I like that the hero and the bad guy are almost the opposite way round to expectations.
Some cool linework, keep it up.

Philip Zeplin · Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2003 2:41 pm

Glad to hear yout think so Smile

I never really thought about it, but yeah I guess they actually are!!
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Philip Zeplin · Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2003 2:23 pm

The new cover for the first chapter was just put up now, thought I'd get some feedback on it!!

Whatcha think???

Its also over at the site of course, http://www.evolution2023.com
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Drew · Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2003 6:47 am

The main problem I see with these is inconsistant lighting. Though for the most part it's very dramatic, it flattens the image significantly. If the lighting can be fixed, but still retain it's dramitic quality, these will look really nice.