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bellas · Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2003 2:12 pm

well simple, a girl playing frisbee photopaint+ painter

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bellas · Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2003 2:28 am

this drawing contains many errors, nobody helps me to improve?

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AndyT · Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2003 2:47 am

You can't take for granted that people will help you.

The pose is not very dynamic ... I don't know how to fix that.
I'm just guessing the problem is that neither leg is angled.

The face looks weird ... I think it's the chin.
I can't explain it so I'll show what I mean.
Mine is awful too but a step in the right direction I hope.

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piter · Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2003 1:18 pm

some problems i can see immediately are:

1) the colours are too saturated.
2) the lighting on the figure looks like studio lighting from the front, while the background has late afternoon lighting (long shadows).
3) the figure looks flat... try to round out the forms a bit better. but before you do that, i would try to look for photo reference of a similar pose (perhaps from tennis or baseball or... ultimate).
4) she's way too high off the ground.

other than that, it's a good effort. Smile

Light · Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2003 2:38 pm

This is close to being a strong work.

BUT... the figure is the center of attention, and it's not strong.

The background rendering is interesting but it just doesnt work with the figure. Composition weak.

Chop the composition at around her knees, focus on her head, and it will be stronger after you fix the anatomy.

http://light1.home.mindspring.com/copies/paintovers/agirl1.jpg

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However, I like the way you rendere the background. If you want to make this work as a full composition then you are going to need to work on makign that a stronger figure drawing. Rotation to the body, fixing the arm anatomy, etc.

Its quite good but as Ive said many times: its better to work on sketching because it will require a lot of work to make it better now.

Youd need to rotate the body.

THe arm is a little weak too.

Remember try to think of how the eye will look at the picture. Focus on head and body. Don't forget gravity.

BTW, any chance you are left handed? Just curious why you chose a left-> action pose. I prefer it going right.

Nice work though, and these are just my opinions.