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bellas member
Member # Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 84 Location: spain
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Posted: Sun Aug 24, 2003 8:21 am |
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hello this my first post in this forum :) to start i post 1 pic from my store ^n_n^ comments please
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topeira member
Member # Joined: 07 Feb 2001 Posts: 553 Location: Holon, Israel
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Posted: Sun Aug 24, 2003 3:02 pm |
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hi man.
nice work. in first look it looks very good.
in second look it still looks solid.
in third look i could spot a couple of minor things that could have been worked on:
1) the girl's forhead is a bit too small. it cuold have been longer (from eyes to top of head).
2) something botherd me about her torso and i see now that it's the fact that it's bent too much upwards.
also the back supposed to bents from about 3rd way from the buttom of the torso. in this posture it looks like it's bent about 2 thirds from the buttom. it's not right. and the fact that it's bent and looked at from top view make me think her back (torso) is too long as well.
should be an easy fix if u cut her upper torso (around the bikini top area) and paste it a lil more towards her ass.
but those are erally small points i made. i love the outcome and it should be col to see more of your stuff.
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eyalyab member
Member # Joined: 11 Jan 2003 Posts: 308 Location: Israel
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Posted: Mon Aug 25, 2003 5:19 am |
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at first glance, that is one bizzare pose!
topeira has made some good points.
i think atop all, the odd bending of the body is what makes it hard to digest.
to add, the creek in the back, where the spine is, should end higher up her back.
i like the colors of this though. very refreshing. |
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