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benjiazn · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2003 6:20 pm

hi this is my frist thread here..and here goes my pic ..enjoy and C&C are welcomed

[/img]new pic im workin on

Absent Minded Abe · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2003 8:42 pm

I really like this. ^^ It almost has a dynamic motion to it even if he is just standing there. It just would look a lot better if you put more to what's in the background, because it's kind of bland.

Drew · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2003 9:19 pm

That's a really good start. The two problems that stand out the most are the lack of consistant lighting, and the arm anatomy. We shouldn't be able to see that much of his bicep. As for the light source, he's backlit by the moon so most of him should be in shadow. Not black, but we shouldn't be able to see nearly much detail as we see now. Think about each little part and what light is hitting it. You can use a desk lamp and an action figure to help.

Keep working on this and you should end up with something really nice.

Critical Pete · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2003 9:37 pm

Like Abe, I too really like this. But it's mainly one part in particular- the face area. The way you did the shadows and the hair and the expression are really cool. It could be further enhanced with more detail and what not, but it's not necessary in my opinion. With the rest... There are some anatomical errors... The one that stands out most for me is the right hand. Seems enormous, especially the fingers. Another thing would be the way you did the sky. Usually skies are darker at the top and lighter at the bottom... In this you made it the reverse ( probably because the moon would be giving off some light ) but really the moon doesn't give off that much light to change the whole sky. But even if it did, the way it is right now with the lightest area at the top, it leads the eye upward and off the page, away from the character and his well done face. There's some other stuff, but it would be hard to say without doing an overpaint, and really I'm not much of an artist to do it.

Cicinimo · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2003 11:40 pm

I like your composition.
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Horrens · Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2003 4:03 am

the gauntlet is a bit odd
it should be worn, not a part of the arm

benjiazn · Posted: Thu Jul 17, 2003 5:57 pm

haha.. thank you guys for all the nice comments... well im still a newbie at cg... and i dont have much time to spend on drawing now days...this pic was drawn long ago but i never had a change to finishe it ..and o i just quikly went over the pic wif somne lines tryin to put a end to this pic... that is y this pic looked kindda werided Rolling Eyes

anyways... thnkx again for the comments... hope my next pic might be better than this one! Laughing

oh and here is a clear version of this one

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cok3 · Posted: Thu Jul 17, 2003 6:12 pm

Very Nice

Great form on the body. I love how you shaded the muscles. Great technique on the fur and grass too. In my Opinion, it would be even nicer if the image was sharper. I

benjiazn · Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2003 9:33 pm

thnkx again! Laughing

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benjiazn · Posted: Sun Aug 03, 2003 9:34 pm

here is another pic im workin on@

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amichaels · member Member # Joined: 28 Mar 2003 Posts: 105

I like the clear version of the first one, but I think it's a little bland. It could use more color.