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Matthias321us · Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2003 2:25 pm

can ya give me a little critique?
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Critical Pete · Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2003 4:23 pm

I don't get it.

Frode · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 3:15 am

It's a four legged robot with two arms, a tail and a snake/dragon like head. Or, no... it's not four legged, is it? It's got feet wich consist of two parts.
Do you see it now?

Matthias321us · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 8:13 am

thank you for clarifying, could someone tell me my mistakes and how to improve it now please?
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AndyT · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 8:31 am

Make it read better! Think in 3D forms. I still don't get the concept ...

and it's too big ... I have to scroll to see the whole thing!
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Frode · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 8:34 am

Add some shadow.

vanishing · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 9:23 am

well, obviously people are having a hard time of figuring out what it really is.. i think its a little to "Straight". no perspective no movement. the feet probably has to be changed. it looks to me like its got 2 legs and 4 feets that all face downwards. i think you should stick to a repitilian (if thats a word) type of feet and at mechanical parts to it. making the lines thicker in some areas. what is it throwing in the air? it has 4 feathers.. with a anemone on top... thats confusing...

aColdOldKodiak · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2003 3:21 pm

first of all the pic is too big, 2nd use forms and shapes the eye recognizes... get to basics, remove all the details and make the forms obvious first, then put on details.
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Matthias321us · Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2003 1:09 pm

Man, you're atough crowd, hmm, I appreciate the critiques, I Guess maybe I should put some more work into it, but that's a give since I posted it in the works in progress section, ya'll act like I think it's finished, naww, well a few of you, but thank you all, I'll do that
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AndyT · Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2003 1:29 pm

The point is: if the drawing doesn't work, the colored version won't work either!
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Ritaku · member Member # Joined: 06 Apr 2003 Posts: 56 Location: uk

i like the idea and how you've made it look personally. although if you want a mechanical look, maybe you should try doing lots of smaller details with multiple parts (if that made any sense....). and for stuff like the tail, try giving it several main parts made up of smaller parts?? (yes i am a confuzing boy..). although i must say i agree with everyone else on the feet issue, i'm still trying to figure out the exact thing. add some shading and more metal-type details me thinks.
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