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L99Relm
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The point of this pic was to work on illustrating that which is dark and rainy. As always, I'd appreciate any helpful critiques and comments you could give me...
A larger version of the above pic...
A closer view of his face:
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2003 11:18 pm |
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Hello
I like it, very good job.
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| Posted: Wed May 07, 2003 7:24 am |
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Matthew: Thanks for taking the time to comment. I'm glad you like it.
Would anyone else care to reply? 
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| Posted: Wed May 07, 2003 7:37 am |
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doesnt that suck when you get no replies? that happens to me all the time 
but n-e-ways, i like the picture too. i cant think of really any specific things you should improve on, but i really like the ghosts in the background, how it takes a while to see them. kinda like real ghosts would be  |
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| Posted: Wed May 07, 2003 7:47 am |
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pretty good job. great mood, i like the water near the door.
The main problem with the pic is the perspective, i think the horizont should be on his eye level but i don't know much about perspective :/
And i understand how you feel about not getting any comments. If you want to get alot of comments you must be incredibly good or incredibly bad or incredibly stoopid 
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| Posted: Sun May 11, 2003 10:15 am |
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Well just a swift comment here, I like it. Something you might want to pay attention to here is the relation of the eyes, mouth, and nose. Those eyes are really far apart for the angle you have the face at. And the lips don't really seem to match the perspective of the nose. It is kind of like his facing is subtly twisting as you move down the face. He's also missing any bottom lashes under those eyes! Also you would probably get some higher contrast shadows judging from his distance to the lighting. His neck isn't quite twisting with his head either. I rather like the way you implemented the rain, and the background detailing is very nice. Kind of makes me think of a combination of Thief and Final Fantasy VIII.
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| Posted: Tue May 13, 2003 8:18 am |
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Some good critiques there, Gothic Gerbil. I went back and tried to fix the eye placement and I also added eyelashes (oops). I changed some other stuff too. But I'm not sure how I'd fix the perspective of the nose/mouth or how I'd fix the neck. Perhaps it would help if you made a quick illustration to show what you mean (i.e., paint-over or diagram on a copy of this). Thanks again for everyone's help.
A larger version...
http://www.metacreativetrend.com/darkrain_5-8-03_big.jpg
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| Posted: Wed May 14, 2003 12:28 am |
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hey, it looks like you drew his nose without paying attention to the angle of the head, it looks like it's drawn straight on....if maybe you tilt the nose a little more it would look better 
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