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There were two inspirations this time: the amazing work of Scott Robertson and Blizzard's Starcraft. I tried to recreate the protoss carrier, didn't remember exactly remember how it looked and I loved to improvise anyway The perspective is as bad as it gets but I like the colours and the idea: The ship has a magnetic field around it, so it can land on any metallic place that has metals.

Haven't shown my writings here before.. here wo go, a short one.. it's small piece of a very, very long story, I don't like to write these stories down.. because I already have the whole thing in my head and I suck at transferring 'em into words:

*cut*

""A group of soldiers is searching a planet's surface, the canyon walls around them go high, some almost touch the clouds.

Soldier 1 (The captain):

"The place seems very organic, sort of alive.. but there's no signs of life"

Soldier is looking down to an opening.

Soldier 2:

"Captain there's something down here, I think you should see this!!"

The Captain goes to see what's there. The soldier is still standing on the ledge in awe. When the Captain gets there a city of ancient race opens before his eyes.

His can just barely open his mouth:

"Oh my... what is it?"

The soldier (next to him) answers:

"I've no idea, never seen something like that in my life"

The other have also come to look what's there.

Captain says:

"We have to report to the base immediately. base, this is group 1-49, we have found somethi.. damn.."

Soldier 3:

"What's the matter?

Captain looks around like looking for something. Then says:

"The radio is out, we'll need to find a better place, the walls are blocking the connection. We might have better change to contact the base from the city, environment around it is more open and satellites could perhaps pick up the signal, let's move out people!!"

The group is running down the hill when they hear a strange noise. Captain whispers (with a silent voice):

"Shhsss, every one quiet"

It sounded like something hit the wall yp there. Then there's another sound, louder than the first one.
The captain reloads his weapon and orders:

"Combat formation!!"

The voices are coming closer and closer.. then one voice is heard maybe ten meters away.. everyone turns, they're sweating and afraid.

Captain tries to encourage his men:

"Keep your eyes on the sky, it might be anything.. stay together and in formation"

The voices echo in the canyon, new voices sound louder than the ones before them, until the whole canyon resembles corridors of a sinking ship. Small rocks start to fall from the heights, with a speed and strenght that could kill anyone. The sky gets darker.

The soldiers form a circle, they're close to each other and it's thundering around them. One of them sees a lighting hit a nearby wall, he gots scared and breaks away of the formation, the captain shouts:

"Stay together!!!"

The guy is trying to get back to the formation, he takes a few steps when a shining blue lightning flashes from the sky and hits him like a bullet, throwing him to the ground. Medic runs to him, get's on his knees, puts his hand on the soldiers neck and tries the pulse... (he's looking down to the soldier) then after a while he takes a look at the captain's eyes and shakes his head.. they had lost a men.

Captain moves his head back and forth, trying to accept what has happened, he thinks for a second and says to his companions:

"We must get back to the base, it's no longer safe here! Hurry!"

Wind is blowing, the medic takes his weapon, puts it on his back and raises the dead soldier from the ground and carries him on his shoulders. They move as quickly as they can.. one soldier turns to take a look at the city one more time and at that moment a glowing lighting breaks through the sky and hits to the ground only two meters away. He's blinded and amazed:

"That didn't come from the clouds!! It came from there!!"

He's pointing his finger to the air. The others turn and take out their weapons, captain raises his gun, asks the coordinates and fires a grenade to the point. The grenade flies through the sky and around 500 meters away it explodes and reveals a surface of a spaceship""

As you can see I'm a crappy writer, especially when I have to write in English. Making a book would be hell to me, but writing (of course screenplay should be "cleaned" by a professional writer) and directing movie is my dream.



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[Sedone]

This is cool, Bg. The organic shape of the ship helps to cover up the perspective problems you mentioned. It reads well, and looks big. The only thing that doesn't seem to fit are those blue energy things. They look sloppy compared to how you rendered everything else. Great picture, though.

[[666]Flat]

Simple plot, k3wl pic.

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Sedone: I should have prepared myself better, make a simple 3d model first to get the perspective right.
The plot is there only to explain the image and the lighting bolts are there only to show what's happening in the plot I'll see if I can do something to make 'em look better..
Thanks a lot for your help!

[666]Flat: Glad you liked it!

The original sketch was for the "speed painting" thread but none would have understood what it is Anyway, here's the sketch:

[Tinusch]

I love it as usual, but I think most of your pictures look a little rougher than they actually are due to the signature. I think it's a little too intrusive and amateurish. If you used a different font, something more sleek, it would improve the overall impact of your picture.

[Lunatique]

Hey, pretty refreshing to see you do sci-fi, Timo.

Try formatting your story into proper screenplay format. It'll read smoother and easier on the eyes.

[S4Sb]

Hey, great piece. The colours are awesome and the perspective problems aren't very obvious to an inexpierienced eye like mine. Well, I can'T give you a lot of critique. I really like the story. I found it pretty exciting. And I'd like to see some more shots from this scene. Are we allowed to contiute fanart to this story-thread? =)
I think it's cool that you found your way back here with some 2d art. Maybe you will get a good crit or two in the close future from that move =)
More more more! faster! more pictures more threads, more stories! =D

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Tinusch: Thanks, making the signature with this damned small Wacom is slooow I have to draw it... so do you like the handwritten signature better? (see below)

Lunatique: I have no idea what's an acceptable format :/ Can you give/send me a very short example how it should be?

Stephan, Thanks! You asked more pictures of this scene.. ok, here's a quickie, it's the ever watching "big brother", servant of the big brother to be exact hehe (he's making sure the soldiers don't find anything too interesting.. ok let's spoil a little: he makes sure the guys never get back to the base):



Wait... I think I have one more.. searching.. here:



One more painting is in the making, I don't dare to show the sketch, it's way too loose.. I'll post it too when I it's done.
Crits seem to be rare nowdays at Sijun, but I'll keep fingers crossed just in case

"Are we allowed to contribute fanart to this thread?"

Yeah, sure!

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Sneak peek to the image I'm painting now (it's heavily cropped, includes only 20% of the whole image):



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[Binke]

goddamn BG you are improving way too fast dude! slow down! making me jealous here.. still think that elf-coloring of yours has one of the coolest moods ever ! (The girl sitting at some dock).

anyways REALLY dig the soldier painting you got up there.

[Frost]

I agree with Binke.
Great work and effort BG!

[Torstein Nordstrand]

Hey there,

you asked for critique, just wanted to point at the old man's nose. It's disturbingly dull, give it some texture, like you did with the rest of the face

(it's probably the least important image, but anyways...)

Thanks,

[Godwin]

that face one is really cool, taht lurred background really makes the face stand out