[Timski]

Hey everyone...well, this is an oil painting that's finished but I'm not happy with it...so any critiques that I can use to better the painting before I have to show it would be great. Thanks alot.

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-tim

[Funk Master Kane]

Good Job.

The only real thing i think that could use fixing is the hat. It doesnt give the look that it is made out of cloth, it looks to be made of bamboo or something. and maybe to blend the shirts shading a little more cause its style of painting makes it stand out from the guy, otherwise it is great.

Keep up the good work.

[pappuftp]

most of my reply posts do not contain such 'analytical' data .. i usually compliment teh good points.. and leave the critical analyisis to others .. but since u use my fav medium.. here goes
dunno if its ur style but the image lacks 'depth'.. kinda flattish..
the perspective lines of the eyes and the mouth dont match.
the finish of the face and neck are not consistent with the rest of the image. i mean texture and technique wise
analyzing the pic ( the pics' the reference assuming )the tones are warmer and have a pastel feel thru out..so ur painting might reflect these aspects.
thats about all that i have 2 say.. besides
somebody might point out other stuff . but u r on the right track.. just try 2 concentrate on solidty. less strokes and more volume..

[eyewoo]

You have spent a great deal of time working on the face, but have kind of thrown away the rest of the picture so that it really looks like two differewnt styles of painting...

By what I see, though, you do very well on the area of focus - the face - so, I guess I would say you need to expand that focus to the entire picture.

[ July 18, 2002: Message edited by: eyewoo ]

[Timski]

Funk Master Kane- Yeah I agree about the hat, I made the darks too dark and the lights too light...I'll smooth it over some...thanks.

pappuftp- Wow thanks, that's really in-depth criticism. I am seriously out of ideas what to do to make the picture less flat...I'm going to see if I can cool down the colors in the background to start. I definitely need to fix that mouth, stupid me. I'm going to try to keep working on the tones and shapes like you said, then post an update. Thanks alot.

eyewoo- Yeah...you're right...I didn't want to overwork the background but I guess I don't have the skill to paint a lot with few strokes. First of all I'll tighten up the hat/shirt, then see what else I can do...thanks for the honesty.
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Keep the criticisms coming....please..............thanks.
-tim

[ July 18, 2002: Message edited by: Timski ]

[Timski]

Followed the crits...


Thanks!!!

[Funk Master Kane]

looks much better