[Rob Why?]

God I hate speed painting.
Now I require crits, crits crits crits, in every flavour goddammit. lemon crits, cherry crits, beef crits, whatever, point out stuff, just show me how intelectual you are, and I'll be all "Oooooooh, tell me steve dave, TELL ME, my loins BURN for you!"

come on tough guys and gals, you know you want too!

[ July 17, 2002: Message edited by: Rob Why? ]

[Francis]

I think there's some cool stuff going on here. I like the character simplification, the simple and unified colors.

I would say work on the spots where there is still some unresolved/ambiguous detail, like in the graphics on her shoes, or the elements on her vest thing. You've set up a drawing where your lines are very sparse and economical, and that's hard to pull off well, but really cool when it's done right. I think there is still a little busy-ness in those areas I mentioned which keep it from hitting that zen of perfectly economical line use.

The other comment I have is that the background is a little distracting for the above reasons. The light blue graphics are very flat and 2D - the curved floor element is nice, and implies some sort of perspective or floor curvature that the wall graphics don't support. I would go way simple on that too.

Bottom line - keep the linework spare and economical like you have it, and really choose wisely where you add higher grain of detail. In a drawing like this that's a valuable tool to control how the viewer perceives your character design.

Anyway, hope all that makes some sort of sense. I liked the image, which is why I wrote so much about it.

[Hyptosis]

Dam, Francis lined tyou up, covered everything I saw. And stated the obvious, it looks great. Good job.

[Rob Why?]

Thanks Mistah, I like your guys stuff, and the comments you left were pretty much what I was feelin bout the picture too.
yeeeehaw!

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[Sumaleth]

Looks like some Penny Arcade "Gabe" influence there.

[Burn]

This is actually my first post at these forums but I've been reading them for a while now.

You asked for hardcore crits... I got 'em:

Her right shoulder doesn't seem to fit on correctly and is placed in such a way that it gets confused with her right breast, which IMHO looks slightly smaller than her left.

Something about her hips bothers me, I think they are perhaps too low. It also seems like her thighs are each thicker than her torso, she looks very bottom heavy.

Last, for such a bad-ass samurai chick her boots seem way too big and clunky, maybe she could get more nimble shoes.

Like the design otherwise, nice face and hair.

Have you tried putting a belt on her?


Burn

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[Rob Why?]

First I'll respond to sumaleth: every time I digitally ink something now, it looks exactly like gabes stuff, so I just ran with it... please don't hold it against me.

As for Burn:
I'm glad you said that burn! See, I only posted here today cuz I'm in a REALLY bad mood, and I figured I'd drum up some moronic responses to a post on a forum and then retaliate! AND HOW! BUT up till your post all the stuff people said was... ACTUALLY USEFULL! Then you came along, FINALLY!

A) Her shoulder does look just like her tits. Your right, what was I thinking? If you stair at them long enough ( I mean to the point where they lose all meaning) then yeah, her boobs start to look totally disproportional. I could easily get them confused with her left shoulder, her face, her boots and my own friggin hand!

B) Her hips are definitely not jerkable enough, whenever I personally try to envision her naked, I dunno, the magic�s just not there. She's just not... a perfect icon of human sexuality. It totally sucks! I need to jerk here, all this hand cream and tissue is gonna go to waste!

C) She�s a space pilot actually, not a badass samurai, DUH. Get it straight! Her boots are made out of a space aged polymer composite that�s actually lighter then air! If the boots are big enough, technically she should be able to float! They�re not clunky at all, THEY'RE ADVANCED!

D) Yes, I have tried putting a belt on her, BUT she's a 2 dimensional image on my computer screen, all I managed to do was scratch the hell out of my monitor with the belt buckle.

Finally: I asked for Lemon Cherry or Beef flavoured Crits, I wanted nothing of this hardcor flavour. (Are crits anything like grits? they sound edible.)

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[Dean Welsh]

My Crit is of the beef persuasion. I propose that instead wearing of big clunky boots, she should in substitute be a naked lesbian licking something (lord knows you love drawing those you sonovabitch.) I also would like to motion for erect nipples... and barring erect nipples give her huuuuuge sideburns.

Actually I'm just writing to say I didn't have a chance to get my color action on tonight, I'll Slop something on it tomorrow if Dave doesn't bog me down with work.

-Dean

[Rob Why?]

I think I could make this the best drawing ever if I: made her a naked lesbian with erect nipples and huge sideburns who's licking something!

[Dean Welsh]

Brits from Britain
Crits from Criteoveria.

Crits, Grits and deliscious Cake?

Crits, Mosquitos and Gnats?

Crits, Boxes and Crates?

Perhaps it's an illness of the Sea? scurvey and the crits?

Does it sound like a religious thing to you?
Mormons, Jews and Crits?

Surely it can't be the result of people being too lazy to type out critique, because that would just be sad.

-Dean

[Rob Why?]

the bloods the crips and the crits.

I think its actually an illness of the sea

"Yaaaar, I've got scurvy and the crits, I needs me some Pine Needle Tea."
"Will that cure the crits too?"
"only a woman and time can cure the crits boy"

[Dean Welsh]

I think I had the crits once, I was floating in the pool on one of those inflatable matresses and I got "The urge".

"Dean NO! it's just an inanimate piece of Rubber!" they pleaded.

I didn't really know what I had at the time, but from your description of the cure, I'm pretty sure that's what I had.

-Dean

[Rob Why?]

I think that burn Guys got the crits, he seems to have a lot of "Urges towards inanimate objects" characteristic of the illness. Notice how he focused on her boobs and her hips in the same post? he must have been like, totally checking out a drawing here. The crits also causes hallucinations similar to those experienced by drunk or brain damaged people. notice he openly admits that he can�t tell the difference between boobs and shoulders. he needs to check into a love hospital IMMIDIATLY!

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[Dean Welsh]

"Code RED CODE RED! we've got an advanced Case of the Crits! "
"Get me a a retractor, we need to pry him away from the Defibrilator!"
"Nurse, we need a woman in here STAT!"
"it's a good thing this love hospital was nearby, who knows what sort of damage a crit ridden man could cause when not confined to a boat where the disgusting destruction can be contained."

-Dean