[L99Relm]

Maybe I have a little too much time on my hands now that it's summer...This is just a random landscape and boy with wings. Any comments, suggestions or critiques would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.



Close-up...


[ June 13, 2002: Message edited by: L99Relm ]

[L99Relm]

Could I please get a reply or two?

[Leroy]

hahahah...
sucks when no one replies don't it?

i like the idea man. it's funny somehow, feelgood.

want a crit?
work on the environment. the kid and the environment don't seem to work together. more contrast might help or maybe even a little more detail.

hope it helps dogg.

[J. Tsang]

it's really good. nice color.
looks like childern book illustration to me. and i love your style.

[jdillon]

Hi

I just thought I'd attempt to go into a little detail as to why they said to work on the enviroment, if that's okay. While I like the colors and overall mood, one thing I noticed right off was that the boy didn't seem to really be part of his surroundings. I can see you have a good handle of atmospheric perspective in the back of the picture, with the way you're blurring things out as the mountains receed, but up front it's a little shaky. The boy is crisp and in full detail, standing out starkly against the hazy background. The rocks he's standing on, though, are blurry and less distinct, and it gives the impression that he's up close while the rocks are farther away. I couldn't tell at first if the rocks were a big mountain, or a little pile of rocks sitting on a ledge somewhere. The boy and the rocks should be in the same plane, the same distance from the camera, so they should have roughly the same amount of light and color saturation and the same contrast and level of detail.

The composition seems a little too wide and open.. I think you were going for a big panoramic feel, but with the boy that small and placed square in the middle I don't know if it's working... One thing you could do would be to crop the image a bit, taking out some of the right and bottom portions of the picture. Bring the focus in on the boy a little more; he's done so well that it's a shame to have him so small in the picture where you can't see the details. If you tighten up the rocks and grass surrounding him as best as you can, and leave the background as nice and hazy as it is, it will read much better. I think if you want it to look more like he's on mountain, you could raise the horizon line up towards his eyes, but I'm not sure. Maybe I'm wrong about all of this.. I didn't respond to this picture earlier because I was hoping someone who could explain this better than I would post. ^.^; I hope that this is a little helpful, though.

Oh! I forgot to tell you that I love the wings, and the way you rendered those lovely, texture mountains in the background. Great job!

-Julie

[ June 15, 2002: Message edited by: jdillon ]

[ June 15, 2002: Message edited by: jdillon ]

[L99Relm]

Leroy: Riiight "dogg"

J. Tsang: Why thank you.

jdillon: Wow, thanks for the detailed critique. I think a lot of your suggestions make sense. I'll see what I can do to improve the picture ...