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nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 6:04 am

hey again. this here is my first anime picture ever. It took about 1,5 hours from sketch to final image. do you like it, and does it look fine. His arm looks a bit wierd 'cause I hadn't inked it, and I had to do it with PS.
C&C please. Tell me what is good on it, and what lacks does it have?!
thnks

sometimes, you can't see the image because it's on my FTP, so please come again later. =)

[ May 28, 2002: Message edited by: nevanlinna ]

nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 8:37 am

hey guys...sometimes it feels very exasperating when nobody do not reply to your posts. I post my pictures here to get some help, and so on....
I know here are a lot of artists who can help me, and give me good advices....
well...that's it. Maybe I should just be more patient...=)

Awetopsy · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 8:39 am

have patience dude.. You've had the picture posted for 2 hours... not alot of people are watching the board all day long.

as per the pic, I think you need to focus on your anatomy... the nose should look like a nose from the side.. not from straight on, also an anime girls nose would be petite, small pointy.

nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 8:45 am

well. thanks for your coment dude. just one thing...who has said that it is a girl?...
anyway...your right with that nose thing...it looks a bit weird...

Fate · member Member # Joined: 16 Mar 2001 Posts: 168

first, get rid of the rose cause it looks really bad, or do some research on rose.

there are too many sketchy lines left untouched for it to be considered anime. Anime is about expressing things with minimum number of lines possible.

yes, the nose has got to go, nobody draws nose like that, a little tick mark should suffice.

i don't feel like continuing cause overall the pic looks really unfinished and what i suggest you do is to have some reference pic and try to copy their style, and then when you feel comfortable do some experiment

nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 10:14 am

fate: If you say so...
I would also be glad to hear what looks GOOD in that...not just hearing right away that naaah....that's not good....do not continue...
But I understand that this is not good!! It's my first!
if you understand, I think you do. ...or...?
well.

Cleoric · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 2:52 pm

Well, I can't see the original picture, but if it's anything similar to the reapaint, it's pretty good. I think Fate seems to be a bit of a jerk. Anyhow, I don't see how that's a guy. It looks like a girl to me. You should probably work on that

Fate · member Member # Joined: 16 Mar 2001 Posts: 168

gee, can't I give a valid critique around here without getting flamed?

navannlinna I forgot to mention what a STUNNING artwork that you created there, and honestly I don't think the repaint was neccessarily an IMPROVEMENT cause yours had your own distinctive style and I found it very refreshing after seeing so many SIMILAR anime-style artworks. EXCELLENT WORK, EXCELLENT WORK INDEED! WOW!

nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 8:31 pm

hmm....fate don't take it so seriously=)

heh. I think the paintover was meant to be a woman, and that's why you can't make it looks like a man...
maybe it's because he has a veil over his mouth...I don't think it's so usual=)
but I wanted to have something unusual to the picture....

thanks everybody

oDD · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 11:00 pm

i am no expert but i watch alot of anime and i like to draw so maybe i can help alittle.

pic overally looks good, the anatomy of the face (as for anime) is fairly good. i think the position of light(middle right) makes the pic more interesting. Plus this pic is drawn in oryginal way but it still in the spirit of anime. If you compare mangas/animes by difrent artists you will notice the difrences in they artwork. This pic got pottential but u should work more on it.

i changed few thing on your picture
added more shading, erased few lines(eyes), changed nose (more anime like), defined her right shoulder, damaged the flowers ( its too hard for me to draw them =]. Compare in acdsee thouse two pictures to see all what i've done . I hope it will help u and u will work more on this pic =]

ps. i think most people here dont care about anime so if youre looking for more comments go to polykarbon.com

nevanlinna · Posted: Tue May 28, 2002 11:14 pm

hey...
oDD: thanks alot. thanks for good advices, very nice to hear!
I'll practice more and more...!

(heh, actually his right shoulder was meant to be like that....his giving his hand to someone...you know. I have a unfinished picture where he is holding his hand on a girl...you'll see it later....)

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