[Cicinimo]

Literary magazine at school needed a centerfold of NYC. Seeing how I'm stuck with the position of art editor, I'm the one thats given two days notice for a specific illustration. Anyways, the assignment was a painting of the new york skyline with space to put two poems where the twin towers were. Its almost sorta accurate. I had a few references from different angles.



c/c, feedback, flames, etc

Cicinimo

[FuzzBeast]

Wow, nice, I love the reflection in the water, only crit would probably be, that it looks kinda like the sun is off to the back left, and the lighting on the buildings on the left (the two that are kinda pink) seem to be light very brightly from the front.
Although it still looks cool, you may want to subdue that pink just a tad. Just a suggestion.

[FuzzBeast]

Oops i meant back right, not back left on the location of the sun, my bad..

[Light]

Water reflections need work. They don't seem quite right/realistic and detract from the sky line given the perspective.

Add a dark blue or cool blue as background as the pink is overused. If you want a sun set add some oranges and reds.

Pretty good work.

[Lee Yiankun]

IMHO, The Reflections should fade faster. Nice piece.

[bearsclover]

I think we all see something in the reflections. My hunch is that you need to blur them a bit more, lower their contrast, and darken them just a little. That ought to do it (IMO).

The color scheme can stay as-is, as far as I'm concerned. You have a definite rosy-pink color scheme going on there, I assume it is deliberate. It's working for me. If you wanted to add a few more cool colors as accents, that might be good, but that's up to you.

All-in-all, it's quite fabulous!!! Wow!

[Freddio]

yea that looks really cool great work as usual!!

[pixelsoldier]

Well done as usual, bro.

I agree with Light in that the water is taking focus away from the skyline. It is just as saturated, and in a way, more involved than the buildings themselves. I played with it a bit to illustrate my suggestion for the water. I realize that my version shows the water in a "calmer" state, but I feel it helps the composition. I also fiddled a bit with the values.

Anyway, they are just minor suggestions. Your stuff always amazes me. If I've made your image worse, I apologize.

[HellSpawn]

Greetings All,

Nice picture Cicinimo. My only crit is that you dont have a good grasp of any atmoshpere in this piece. the city line looks flat and looks like it was cut out and pasted. I did a quick paint over to explain....



Notice how the buildings seem to have more depth now?


pixelsoldier: I dont agree with you totally... I think the sky should stay dark cause he mentioned that he was going to put text on the skyline. If the sky is to light the text will be harder to read. What i did was I darkened the top part of the sky to close in the picture some more.

Cheers.

- Shawn

[pixelsoldier]

Hmm.. yea, now that I look at it, I don't like what I did to Cincimo's sky either. I lost a lot of the depth he created. I still like my water better, though.

[Cicinimo]

Thanks tons for the crits guys! Really useful! I'm working on a repaint now, using what you've shown me. Thanks again.

Cicinimo