[Artgolem]

Knights of the Shroud



Any and all feedback welcome! Thanks for looking!
-Matt (edited to fix the link)

[ February 01, 2002: Message edited by: Artgolem ]

[Ian Jones]

Pretty cool. I like your style, and the sequentials are cool. I couldn't get anything from that link though, Geoshitties said it couldn't find the 'requested page'.

I like the way you have used line width to emphasise certain forms, especially noticeable when she thrusts the pike into him, you can see that so clearly because of the thick lines of the pike, his head and the lower line of her arm. Its great because it tells the viewer which parts of the action are important, and it empahsises the actions.

Lets see more!

[MoleculeMan]

I like each of the panels seperately, but i think that they don't work together that well, mainly the second and third. I don't know why. It might be becuase the motion seems to be exaggerated with the lines a whole lot in the third frame, but the actual pose doesn't seem to be that "powerful". Perhaps a differnt angle would be better. Also, from a point of suspending disbelief, i can't imaging her holding the spear that way that she could get any amount of power out of it, i guess the hand looks too rotated and is from to far of an angle. Nice comic, i only am taking issue with the last frame.

jake

[Pat]

I really like this. It's got a lot of direction and is clear and easy to follow. That might sound obvious, but in the comic realm it can be a more difficult to achieve than is at first obvious. My crit: the fonts are a little unusual. In my own personal comic work I try to use lettering (or fonts) which look natural but are easy to read and not too flashy. A flash font can distract the reader, or even worse, cause him to halt and puzzle over what you were trying to say. Nothing will yank someone out of the narative faster. Still, this is fantastic. Good job!

-Pat