[Strawberrysauce]

closer view...


hi, this is an illustration ive been working on and off for sometime now (in between uni work etc) Its cd artwork for the band Fragile Human Organs. i used a photo referance of myself to get the basic shapes, but dont worry, i have a face.

anyhow, comments? crits? especially on the wings as im having a lot of trouble with them, they are meant to sorta be folded up, yet still appear large, yet not fill up too much of the background.

deadline approaching, need opinions please...

[ December 17, 2001: Message edited by: shamhead ]

[Sumaleth]

Very interesting picture - different.

Suggestions? Hmm, well I didn't know those were wings until you said. You need to show them joining the body. His right hand looks like an abnormal growth, so you either need to make it more clear or remove it. The lighting is very "camera flash" which is a little cheap. You could darken the head and body more to the left and then light the shadowed area up with some red light (reflecting from the background). The shoulder seems to have lost it's form in the shading too, it could benefit from looking a bit more rounded.

Row.

[shahar2k]

yah what wings? heh I love the face though it's a great Idea, although it seems like you didnt run enough with it, could do a lot more with the indent pattern Idea...

[eVilAsmo]

The face screams class imo..

being really crass here, but I'd say the face makes the pic absolutely, and everything else is just stuff on the side.. you're onto something with the cool "under the skin" sort of effect..

I like it alot.

[Strawberrysauce]

thanks for the comments...

Sumaleth: good, i wanted it to be different. a lot of good suggestions, id have to agree with most of them. ive been staring at this pic for tooo long now, i should have noticed the comment about the shoulder myself. thanks

shahar2k: seems ill have to define the wings a bit more. about the pattern idea, do you mean that i should have more indents \ patterns over his body? - might look good

eVilAsmo: the face is the main focus of the pic but i think your right about the lack of interest in the rest of the image, ill have to look into it. i seem to be onto a winner with the embeded pattern, ill maybe continue the theme. thanks

everyone: has anyone ever drawn angel wings? especially the way in which they attach onto the body, having trouble in this area.

cheers

[Soulfuct]

add more texture or veins or something to his sleek skin...remove the wings...work on the tunnel more....and ladys and gents we have a winner! I love the "uniqueness" of the approach taken here.

[Muzman]

Screams 'Tool' to me, but I suspect that's not your fault.
I agree that the rough, grey wings get lost in all that smooth colour (look like some protruding bones in the background. Or perhaps some mucus membrane stuff). I think you'll have to change the composition some to get them more obvious. Bringing the head down a bit or generally pulling back the frame might work. But since I didn't notice them in the first place and they aren't important to me you could just leave it or can them altogether. Looks alright like that