[nickmarksdotcom]

Alright you all have seen these but not together and not with the words, etc. Let me have it!! Good? Okay? God it sucks!! Feedback please.

For extra points kiddies see if you can decode my main characters words.

THese are the first two pages to the comic.





Thought I would edit my post and add the possible cover to the book.



[ June 02, 2001: Message edited by: nickmarksdotcom ]

[Mharett]

this is pretty cool, im a bit lost from the introduction of the character though. i like how you used the red lines/circles to direct attention to different parts of the comic.

[ May 30, 2001: Message edited by: Mharett ]

[nickmarksdotcom]

well I the main character is suppossed to be losing his mind so the dialogue is suppossed to be disjointed. What exactly didn't you get?

[immi]

Why are u saying it sucks ...it Looks great man! The layout is superb and the story is intriguing.

I think the figure in the lower right of the first page looks out of place. Maybe it's the resolution, but it doesn't look very real. Seems very stiff, and the water ripple(?) seems a bit bold.

Love to see more...

[Psycho Boy Jack]

Wow! This is great! I WANT MORE!!!

[rdgraffix]

I like it!

It has a very distinct style, and enough gritty atmosphere to keep even me interested.

Great work, I'm looking forward to seeing more.

[nickmarksdotcom]

I just posted a hidden code in the dialouge within the picture...I wonder if anyone will get it?

Immi: I was just trying to be funny at the top Yes..the ripples have been noticed by a few people...I will do my best to fix them before I publish.

Gseegert: You will get more! I am working on this thing full time. STay tuned to the board.

rdgraffix: If i keep you interested I know I am doing my job

[duhroach]

nice stuff. Very nice
Never thought of making a comic book.

Although you pull off the style quite nicely. Infact, almost too nicely 0o.. You're not a communist are you?

Good stuff man. I love it..

~Main

[Rinaldo]

heh, well. I must say I'm not a big fan of this sort of subject matter. but, the sequential story telling seems to be working out well. it puts me in mind of David Mack, (which is a good thing=). this is the sort of sequential art I like=)

[Poprocksz]

Vertigo hasn't called you yet?

i love the style with the words. Very good
and very different from what people have been doing........keep it up.....

[shahar2k]

the message ("I will eat your eyes because you are inside my mind") first of all, is very static wording... you could improve it by saying "I will eat your eyes get out of my mind" dynamics in words works much like in drawing, if everything is in the present than you get a kind of boring sentence. by giving a command you can create tension... I'm no writer though, heh it's just a hobby

these are EXCELENT the color you added to the second page clarified it immensely from the other version, the only thing that bothers me is the rectangle around the eyes in the last panel, since all the other markings are circles, a rectangle seems out of place, it allso grounds the eyes making them seem static again, as if there's no movement... you could get rid of the last marking alltogether, and use another color change (such as blue streek behind the hand and head?) to represent the movement and bring out the image as opposed to the rectangle.

[Striker]

At the risk of being overly picky, the only crit I have is in spelling, a lot of mistakes caught my attention as I looked over the first page.

retnal = retinal
alais = alias
thousands = thousand
werid = weird
I'd change rotted to rotten, but thats just personal preference
amist = amidst
choas = chaos..

blah.. you get the point..
I realize that some of it is just your choice in word usage to add character to well.. the character, but even so I'd still try to at least use correct spelling throughout.


Other than that, its good stuff, I'm interested in seeing where the story goes.

[h*sync]

I like it a lot,

but conversly, I really don't agree with the arrows and lines in the second image. I think they detract from the feel of it, but adding directions and bounderies to a sortof "outside the lines" kinda picture

[nickmarksdotcom]

duhroach: No I am not a communist although I do agree with some things in communism. I love the good ol USA and capatilism is OK by me hehe

Rinaldo: I take being lumped in with Mack a compliment. THanks Rinaldo.

Poprocksz: Nope Vertigo hasn't called yet. I sure hope they do though.

shahar2k: YOU GOT IT!! and I think you are right. I like what you said much better. I will change it to a command. I like your suggestion.

The rectangle has been sticking out kind of sorely at me lately too. I think you are right...I might just yank it out all together.

[artifish]

wow, this is very different- i like it a lot. when is it gonna be out? And where can i buy it?

[Darkmoon]

i usually dont like work like this... but i have to say. i like this... id buy it.

i dont know if thats a compliment cause i buy alot of comics...

but i like the... morbid, messy feel to it... definitly show more... i wanna know your hero! bio bio bio!

-Lisa
DM

[A. Mount]

Hey! Look! You added a... fish!

aadm:: wanders off.

[Radiater]

Hey Nick,

I was telling a guy I work with about this stuff. I wanted to send him the URL for the second page. Anyway, on having a closer look at it, I noticed a typo. You spelt darkness wrong in the one box. You used: "Is an eternal darkenss (sic) to me."

Either way, the fact that I was telling a guy at work about your stuff goes to show you that your work has impact. Nuff said.

Radiater.

[black_fish]

I think it looks good as a painting. As a comic I think there are some huge issues in storytelling. It looks more like an experiment than a comic, but as it is it's very interesting.