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YAZ · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 1:51 pm

Trying to find a name for her...crits always welcome.
-Michael

The Drawing

The Final

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ReSistanZ · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 4:18 pm

Wow, wonderful!

Weird no-one replied yet... The only thing I have to say is that the lighting on the dress or whatever I should call it is a bit unnatural, maybe you should fix that. The rest is very cool.

swampbug · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 4:53 pm

First off... That sword just rules! All the textures on her skin are crystal clear.

But.. what would make this image more complete is:

Make the lightning a bit more defined. All that really entails in running a small brush though the middle of the lightning streaks to make them have a brighter core. Medium blue color set on screen or lighten mode would do. This'll make the lightning less blurry, Another area that really standout out is her ass. Its very low contrast on her ass. Darken those creases on her ASS

god I lvoe that word.
Another tip, All those crackle doodies on her cape are great, maybe add some highlights on the edges of the "cracks" facing the lightning. her boob is blurred out too much. I'd love to see these changes, it'd make the picture a whole lot better IMO.
-tom

Matthias · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 7:28 pm

i also like the sword. but the lighting on it makes it look a lil fuzzy.

the girls hot
loox weird tho when people stick their back straight and their chest forward, makes their ass stick out a lot. But you drew it properly

Thrush · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 7:36 pm

YAZ I like. The sword, the mood, that tight little... anyway I vote to name her Electra. Keep 'em coming.

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YAZ · Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2001 9:56 pm

Thanks for the suggestions everyone, I updated the image. I like the name Electra.

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trudel · Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2001 5:45 am

"By the power of greystoke..." hehe
Nice pict !

Rob M · Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2001 2:42 pm

greySKULL, Trudel.

Grey STOKE was Tarzan...

visual myriad · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 2:56 am

Good job on this Yaz (especially the drawing).

Hope you don't mind, but I knocked up a quick paintover. This is unfinished, but resolved enough to illustrate a few points (she's starting to look like the singer from Kiss!):

The composition itself has some problems in that right away you are leading the viewers eye of the page. The black background isn't doing anything to neutralise that. Cutting both feet of at the ankles makes for a general uncomfortable feeling.

So I've added in a stronger light source (from the lightning hit on the sword) and hinted at some background elements (maybe stonehenge?). These elements, plus using the clouds as motion lines brings back some movement. I used the lightning to bring the eye back down her arm, to the center of the image.

Love that butt.

Hope to see more of these from you Yaz!

christian · junior member Member # Joined: 01 Apr 2001 Posts: 6

yo yaz, i like this one nice,dood. it's good to see that you're posting a pre-colored image, too. it really gives us a chance to see the pencil work prior to the coloring.

IMHO, try to make the cape w/ less jagged edges. i get a feeling of the caped being overdefined; from both the light and the actual drawing. excelent job on the torn coth, could not have been any better

c.

theresa · member Member # Joined: 05 Apr 2000 Posts: 200

hehehe her boobs just got a bit more sharp