[neff]

I did this short time ago,
but i'm pretty unhappy with the lightning.
Could someone help me?

[neff]

well i re-do the coloring using an old paper style or somethink like that.
What do you think?

[Winged Monkey]

Much improved. Neet style... kinda sumi or wood block print esk...

Incongrously dark shadows on parts of the face are a hard read, only crit. Would look cool with text cartouches...

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WM

[manofsuede]

i believe the face area could use some cast shadows. it seems that the light is only coming from one source, the upper left of the painting, so on the subject's left side of his face (our right) should be some dark cast shadows, especially from his nose.