[Jarno Koole]

What kind of feeling does the expression
awake in you?

Should there be more space in right
because the direction of her gaze?

Comments, crits and overpaints are welcome.

The image is supposed to be very
graphical. Colours are very limited
as you may have noticed. This compromise
is made because of her expression, which
is quite accosting.

I tried to capture movement here. She's
turning her head while talking..

..I guess

[Mr. T]

the expresion and spontaneousness(heh) is just kickass here. there are some minor anatomy errors, tho. try mirroring it horizontally, you'll find some errors easily that way.

[Svarling]

Mr T, be careful about mentioning anatomy errors. Maybe his beloved looks exactly like this

Anyway, very nice work. The minimalistic approach is beautiful. I would say, you should even give the drawing more space to the left. It would make the picture look more interesting.

[Mr. T]

teeth

[Jarno Koole]

Thanks for the feedback..

Mr. T:

You're right. The teeth look weird..
Glad that you noticed. I'll fix that.

You're right about the anatomy issues.
There are lot of them present. For
example the chin seems to be too flat
on the right.

Svarling:

Thanks I'll try that. The composition
might end up more interesting that way.

[Beowulfthefallen]

The mouth region is the most error-riddled it looks like. I can't quite place my finger on it, but either the top lip or the bottom lip isn't on center with the nose and the center line of her face. I like the shading and stuff so far though.