[Infinity Girl]

hi everyone.i'm a new comer of this forum.this is a pic that i started two years ago and still haven't had the desire to finish it.any kinds of critics are welcome.

here's the pic.

[ January 12, 2002: Message edited by: Vincent ]

[jome]

And how does this photo album thing work? We need to login or something before we can see the pic. And we want to!

[HawkOne]

I don't want to register an account with yourphoto.com ... I get more than enough junk mail as it is ...

It sounds rather interesting, a drawing in the works for 2 years, and you haven't got "desire to finish it". Hmmm, I wonder how it could look ...

Please get an account in one of a zillion free webservers ...

[elam]

Hey dude,

my webspace expires in about two weeks, so if you don't mind, I'm posting it for you.
I likes.

[Infinity Girl]

HawkOne:sorry for the inconvenience in veiwing the picture.and my pervious might be a bit misleading,it is just a old sketch and it didnt take me two year time to work with.i just dont have the willpower to finish it.
Elam:thanks a lot for your help!i really appreciate it.

[ January 12, 2002: Message edited by: Vincent ]

[HawkOne]

Hi Vincent,

I think it looks quite interesting, I can't quite grab a storyline, but the elements seems quite clear, magic/evil, travel, love, telepathy, dreaming, and a funny looking grinning horse ..

Compositionally it is rather confusing with many things drawing the eye from the bottom left to top right. The empty area top left attracts attention, since everything else is filled with imagery, it stands out a bit.

The shading is a bit uniform, the crosshatching is mostly good, following the shapes, nicely indicating form. However, I would say that it has 3 different shades, light, medium and dark, which in itself is ok, but I would spread out some more darker areas here and there to emphasize form and create more of a sharp relief overall. The demonface (?) is a bit overworked, he has some nice (not human) physical features though.

The demon(?) foreshortening seems good too, except maybe for his left upper arm, which seems a bit off, since he is obviously not human, I guess it doesn't make much sense to comment on odd musculature and bone features (like the knee). The horse anatomy has gone a bit haywire, with huge muscles going in all directions. The funny grin may detract from the general mood of the piece though, so I'm not sure if that is appropriate. Great expression though ...

Now for the willpower part, I think it may have to do with your approach to this drawing, probably making things up as you go. Since you have invested so much time in this piece you may be scared of destroying it with whatever the next step may do to your hard work. It happens to artists all the time, you reach a point where you think, if I continue I might make a mess out of it.

Starting with a plan is a better approach, you think about the motif, making preliminary sketches/studies/composition (horse-anatomy for example ) , BEFORE you commit to the final piece. The chance of getting stuck then will be less. But, of course there is still a good chance you may have to start over anyway, but that should'nt deter you from finishing the piece.

Repetition is the only path to perfection ...

End of crit/pep-talk, Keep up the good work.

[ January 12, 2002: Message edited by: HawkOne ]

[Infinity Girl]

that's exactly what I want to hear.thanks,hawkone.
Haha,I didn't notice that that creature is grinning.now I think it really sucks..

I also think that it is kind of messy and unorganized.I didn't really have an idea about what kind of story it is going to be,the images just came up to my mind and I just put it down on the paper..
once again,thanks all of you spending time looking at this crappy pic.