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maceface · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 2:09 pm

this was drawn for a fan fic story for the opera HL mod. I *think* im done...but i need some crit. thanx all

KiNgStiNg · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 2:42 pm

aaah ive seen this....its kewl Mark.....
i suggest you hurry up with that damn sniper!@
haha dont let me rush you i can be patient

Matt Elder · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 4:35 pm

Hey the sketch looks good and the style is nice and kinda clean. For a person who looks like they've been working some long hours, how do they manage to keep that shirt clean and uncreased

Other than that I'm not sure what to say as I don't know what you are doing with the image. Half of it seems textured (like the jacket, hand, gun) and part of it doesn't (face, neck and shirt). Maybe add a little shading to these areas.

Vesuvius · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 5:15 pm

maceface- you're mark li? cool seeing you here

digismack · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 5:22 pm

maybe not only should it be creased , but it should have blood stains on it?

Luke_de_Sade · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 7:08 pm

I don't dig the gun. There seems to be something wrong with it.

Asides from that, that's one cool pic.

Pigeon · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 7:54 pm

I agree with Luke - the values on the gun make it seem like it's twisted. Also, the handle of the gun doesn't seem thick enough, or the position of the hand suggests it's holdeing a slimmer object than the gun. Other than the gun, the values in the drawing are really great, and most of the rendering of the figure is good too, except for the eyes. There doesn't seem to be enough space between the edges of his eyes and the outer edges of his head. I think a head should be about 5 eyes across.

Minor problems. Keep up the good work

Dean

[ July 25, 2001: Message edited by: Pigeon ]

maceface · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2001 9:22 pm

thanx for the input guys.

this was just a little side project i was working on...sorta a break from kingsting and my next big project.

matt: well i agree with you about the face and the neck being totally simplified. my exuse/explination...way back in 7th grade i was totally into anime 7 years later i sort stopped liking it so much...i altered my drawing style from anime to more realistic. although i kept some anime aspects...i.e. the simplified face etc. But i do appreciate you suggesting i add some shading.

thanx

Ves: Nope im not mark li. im a different mark. ...im gonna take that as a compliment though.

digismack: now that is an idea i honestly didnt think of. right before i wrote this i was thinking coffee stain...but then ruled it out cuz it would look like he was that doof from the movie "airplane" who had the drinking problem.

luke and pigeon: hehe i totally agree...in the short amount of time i did this in...(cough cough intro to business) that gun stands out like a sore thumb. I couldnt find the *right* position for it. and the eyes...you are right pigeon...they need to be closer.

anyways thanx for the comments.....if you spot anything else let me know!

[ July 25, 2001: Message edited by: maceface ]