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nickmarksdotcom
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Still working on this so I thought I would post it here. Any suggestions?
This page actually comes after this page...
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feebsaint
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| Posted: Fri Jun 22, 2001 9:39 pm |
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If you'll remember my last post (concerning the second pic in this post of yours), all I had to say was how impressed I was, and how perfectly untouchable it was. Well, you touched it... and though it adds more to it, there are 2 things I have something that may-or may not- be worth mentioning.
On both of these things, I'm blown away, but the expressions of two faces I don't feel "cut it" with the genius of the remainder of the pieces... On the top... the dude hanging by his fingertips. He looks like he's doing a bit of bad acting. Like, 'oh... I'm ...so scared I might fall... now where's my hamburger?'
The face in the melting circle (which geometry, sorry, I also think detracts a bit) seems like a regular guy trying too hard to look freaked. ... maybe use that stretching you've got going... on his upper teeth? Make 'em look bigger? I dunno... something about these two expressions prevent me from 'being sold' on the creepiness of the underlying theme you've got going to an amazing degree.
Oh... and the corner of the playing card, in the top image, is quite noticeable [edit](the one that seems to be sticking through another card in the pyramid)[/edit], and I believe would look better if it were painted out. I hope you don't get the wrong message from me... hell... I'm basically worshiping at your feet, but I just see a couple of scuffs on your shoe.
-$0.02
[ June 22, 2001: Message edited by: feebsaint ] |
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iface
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| Posted: Sat Jun 23, 2001 6:01 am |
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OOOOooohhh mannn....
i love it, for sure.. its really original and well executed... congratulations.. maybe the photo face at the right top of the upper page seems to be artificial, i mean, the expression is not dramatic, its like: "look that fly..."  i'm exaggerating, of course.
anyway, great comic, send me a printed copy  |
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autobots transform
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| Posted: Sat Jun 23, 2001 8:03 pm |
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| this is great! |
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Dr.Squirley
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| Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2001 3:47 pm |
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man. . . what are you high?
no... ok
there nice..;kinda repeditive in color and geometry but it fits with your whole thing, so snickers i mean kudos to you. |
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nickmarksdotcom
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| Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2001 9:22 pm |
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Hey all, Cranked on the pieces today. I really happy how they turned out and I really grateful for all the good advice you gave...espeically to Feebs. It is great that you are diggin on the artwork but even better that you can lend such creative critism to it. All the stuff you said was golden. Ohh yah, I don't know If I have told you but your site....is litterally the coolest on the net for chat. I have got to go back 
autobots transform: LOve your name!
iface: very true..the pic did look horrible and fake. I hope you like it better now.
Dr.Squirley: I do get high from time to time. Helps the creative juices get flowing. I did this piece however sober. |
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gekitsu
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| Posted: Tue Jun 26, 2001 2:25 am |
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i love it!
that layout of your first posted page is sooo loveable just crazy |
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