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Dan Webb · Posted: Sun May 20, 2001 10:46 pm

Okay heres the inked version of Albert.... for some reason i never recieved any critics of the penciled sketch...oh well, i guess it happens... any ways, i'm going to color this dude in now.... so any comments, and critics would be great..

An Interesting Gun(!)

Bjorn · Posted: Mon May 21, 2001 6:34 pm

I like the pic, pretty good dramatic pose...

Since you're dying for crits

here's mine:

The hand to the viewer's right (the only hand, duh!) seems off...the hand's "body seems too short...
And I think I would have turned him the other way. The "Cool Gun (tm)"

is now turned away from the attention of the viewer, giving it the feel of an afterthought, rather than the centerpiece. *S*

Just my opinions.

Da Bjorn

NukleoN · Posted: Mon May 21, 2001 9:35 pm

Hey there..

Yeah my crits would be, the lines are all the same thickness it seems..use line weighting to bring things forward or send them back in space. The arm to our right is way too short..and the hand is pretty small (I always err on the side of big hands, it tends to look more 'heroic'). Also, the pose is slightly awkward, but that is not a giant problem here...

Will be interesting to see the painted version...

Dan Webb · Posted: Mon May 21, 2001 10:16 pm

Hmm, that’s the only problem posting on the Sijun forums, very few, skilled, Anime artist. I tend to view things from a VERY different angle. Therefor i do not use line weight (i have in the past) and also i never enlarge the hands and feet. I prefer a proportional figure. (I’m not sure about the arm lenght, it appears okay to me… perhaps I’m wrong) Although, I do agree on the pose being funky, I don’t really like it either….but…I don’t mind it so much.

As for the hands, they appear deceiving and possibly very wrong, though, its foreshortened to the back, that’s why it appears strange (its a rather extreme hand gesture). As for the gun, yeah, for some reason A. (hehe) i ran out of paper space (my bad) B. an instructor of mine picked that right out. He wanted something more pronounced that would show the gun at extreme angles... oh well...

Critics are always good, and welcome...(actually they are very important)

[ May 22, 2001: Message edited by: Dan Webb ]

Dan Webb · Posted: Mon May 21, 2001 11:20 pm

okay then, very well, i shall increase the lenght of the arm, and change the hand, it looks just tooo funky... (its all digital afterall

)

good good