[Totally]

All right, I gotta lot more to do to this one...



critique away...

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[Sumaleth]

Certainly on the right track there. The thing that jumps out at me is just that the shading style makes it look like she has a dirty face. But keep working on it.

Row.

[philjaeger]

The painting looks nice. realistic.

1) Try using more colors. where you see a warm color look for the cool version of it.

2)look for bands of color. possible some ochre in forehead. magenta in the areas where the blood is closest to the skin - nose, ears, lips, etc. possibly some green in the lower half. (these are just things to check. they may not be there, but it would help if there was more color variation)

3) check to make sure the features on her face are straight. the left side of her face looks like its kinda melting off....kinda...

4) i see you're catching some rim light on the left side of her face. really look around all the edges for that.

5) include the sternomastoid variation in the neck. you've started to indicate it with a line, but its an actual mass. if you could get the clavicle in there that would be great, just so it looks like the neck is resting on something.

6)this is a guess...either the space between the bottom of her nose and brow is too long or the space between the bottom of nose and chin bottom is too short.

7) you've gotten a little too attached to capturing her eyes before paying attention to the rest of her face. develop everything at the same time, that way mistakes will fade away more easily.

8) nice eyes....but don't be afraid to change them if you have to.

Phil

[Totally]

a few changes. haven't had all too much time to work on it though. Please feel free to make any commens/suggestions



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