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Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 8:17 am

I just did this pic... it took all up 6 hours from the base sketch to completeion...

Line art?

this is a continuation of Klayhamns thread..
http://www.sijun.com/dhabih/ubb/Forum2/HTML/008322.html

Crit would very much be appreciated.. there are few things which im unsure of..

also I was going for the comic kind of look.. rather like Dhabihs earlier works..

Thanks

Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 8:19 am

oh also..

The background I dea is a rip from Joachims gas mask pic..

hope you dont mind.. well mines not exact;y the same.. just the same colour scheme..

faustgfx · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 8:21 am

(yay!)

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Zoso · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 8:26 am

I like the colored version. It has the foggy look to it, which is pretty cool.

Your design has me a bit confused though. The legs seem a bit off at the knees, and I'm not sure what the shoulders are doing either. Not too bad overall, but I think it needs some refinement. It's hard to tell how the limbs are positioned.

Superbug · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 10:25 am

Well...i think the sketch is a lot cooler. I think the robot is too dark, and doesn't look as mean as it should. I like the fog, but i do not like the lighting...reminds me of Saturday Night Fever or whatever.

Disco Robot? Sounds cool enuf

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Tinusch · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 10:29 am

I think the colored version is AWESOME. That looks so good. Awesome job.

absinthe · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 11:05 am

Klayhamn · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 11:15 am

Very nice Fredido

I like the way the colored version looks more ferocious - but i do think it's a bit too dark for it's many details...

Coloring is great tho... i can't color at all :/

It's also a bit TOO wobbly for my taste, especially because the colored version looks more realistic - so the "wobbliness" doens't fit with the realism.

Cool, so now we're gonna have a robot-thread, like the gas-mask thread?

I'm working lately on more mech stuff and robots.. i'll post a new one once I find one that I'm happy with.

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EviLToYLeT · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 11:20 am

Yes. Very nice

But i'd have to say... the lights really bother me. Can't pinpoint what it is though.. Don't lights have a bit of shading from the place they come from?

Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 3:09 pm

thanks for the replies..

yea I dont like the unsteady lines..

I guess my hand isnt steady enough

seeing that I traced my scanned sketch in photoshop...

well if someone else would like to colour my line art id like to see what they comup with...

Ill post a cleaned up version..

EviLToYLeT: how du mean?

Joachim · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 4:05 pm

looks cool freddio, don't mind you rippin of my colors at all, hehe. I see your linework has improved a lot.
Comments would be, to think while drawing it , what purpose parts should be designed as it is. Like every part should have a believable function in a way....then the shapes will, since it's a technical robot, look more convincing.
lights could need some more sharp edges, now it's more foggy shading, but harder edges and light that gives/shows the form and materials clearer could give it much more depth.

hope you don't mind some comments, pic looks good

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Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 4:51 pm

Hmm made a few small changes added flaking paint and stuff

Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 4:53 pm

arniemg · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 5:06 pm

that is very nice.

your attention to lighting makes it appear as if it was rendered with a raytracer.

TheMilkMan · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 5:41 pm

good work freddio...really like the colro vesion though the b&w is not bad either

Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 6:17 pm

Thanks for the comments guys...

much appreciated..

EviLToYLeT · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 6:36 pm

Hrmm.. I have no idea what I was saying.

But anyway, It's the lights on the robot primarily. Teh ttop two on his shoulder blade. Shouldn't they provide a basic definition of curvature on the robot? Guess that's what was bothering me. But none theless, excellent work. The more recent attempt does look better.. but to me I guess the lights look a bit cartoonish. Anyone else get the same effect?

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Freddio · Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2000 6:44 pm

heh if I knew exactly what you were trying to say id change it