[bj91x]

Okay, so we all know that I'm not a very good writer. So shoot me.

Anyway, I wrote some stuff and put these writings in my web site. The problem is, I'm not very good at explaining things. So, if you're good writers, could you check out the stuff in my "design diary"? I'm not trying to get an award winning essay. I just need to make sure that it gets the point across well, and that the readers understand what I'm talking about. Read the "tekken tag" section. You don't have to read the "tomb raider" section, but I'd appreciate if if you check out both. Let me know if I explained them well. ^_^

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Baro Jung http://www.geocities.com/bj91x

[Atreyu]

I wasn't able to read it. The layout gets all fussed up in Netscape, and in some parts the letters blend in almost completely with the background.

BTW, I love writing, have some stuff on my website.

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www.illusionart.com

[bj91x]

Sorry about that. I wish I could test my site on netscape, but unfortunately, I don't have netscape.

[Jerry]

I'm not a good writer but I just wanted you to know your web designing skill isn't that well.

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-KARN- Forever. Die? Never

[bj91x]

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I'm not a good writer but I just wanted you to know your web designing skill isn't that well.

Oh, yeah. You should be a professional critic.

[Light]

When you write something you need to think about the audience. Are you writing to a friend? company? or whatever.

You also need to decide on the reason or purpose of the writing. Is it to entertain? inform? describe? argue?

When you decide on those things then you need to write a rough draft and refine it. Good writing is a process of refinement.

You need to make sure the paragraphs are good, grammar is correct (have you used too much passive voice? complete sentences? etc), and spelling is proper.

Anyway, your game diary writing seems to be informal, opionated, and mainly for entertainment or amusement. The ideas and suggestions you make about the games do not sound like they are suppose to be taken seriously.

You should generally avoid making statements such as "This game will have the best game play". Instead, you should just describe the game play and the let the reader decide for him/herself if the game play is really good.

You should use examples in your writing.

For example this is not good writing:


I wouldn't give weapons, like guns to the young Lara. While this may sound boring, I've thought up of many ideas that would work great. In fact, the gun won't be missed
at all.


This DOES sound boring. What ideas have you thought of? Why are they great? Why do you make the judgement "The gun wont be missed at all" for me? If you write well then I can make those desicions for myself.

So, basically, clean up the grammar, get it out! (dont beat around the bush), and then let the reader make his/her own desiscions.

[bj91x]

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind. I'll rewrite it, and you can see if it's any better. It probably won't be a whole lot better, I really suck at writing.