[MisterOwl]

If anybody out there is actually following the story, I'm sorry this page is posted so late. I was away from my computer for the holiday, and didn't have a chance to post it. I hope you enjoy it.



Critiques are always welcome. Thanks for viewing!

[Dhabih]

This is great

Crit? hmmm..oh yeah, its not a 25 page book on my bedstand.


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[CapnPyro]

hehe that's great, yah ive been followin the whole story! Bring on page 5!

-Capn

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[Rhomb]

Smashing . How long does it take you to draw and color one page? BTW, you should add links to the previous pages for those who haven't seen them.

-Ville

[This message has been edited by Rhomb (edited November 30, 2000).]

[Hightop]

Could you work faster.... I want to see more... more more MOOOOOORE...

well... it's cool looking.
Like the alien style.

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[Matt Elder]

hehe.... I haven't seen the other 3 pages (I don't think) but I like this. I know doing panels opens you to making more 'mistakes' but there is one that does stand out a bit and that is in the second panel. I realise that you are playing with perspective a little bit but his back leg looks really ackward coming from behind the tractor wheel.

My only other comment is more a technicality. The gun you've drawn I believe can only fire one shot at a time before it requires reloading. How can it shot as rapidly as you have it depicted in panel 1 & 5. The other thing about this was in panel 5, farmer joe is shoting away but not in panel 6. This just made the 'flow' seem a little ackward.

I agree with the previous post, can you post a link to the other pages or the threads they may have been in. Cheers.

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[opticillusion]

Excellent work! I haven't seen the others as well...but from looking at this, I'm going to do a search the second I finish this post.

Wait, just spotted something. Real minor, but in frame 4, you have the farmer's hat saying CO-OP. Perhaps making a little red decal on the hat in frame 2 will help unless you've got two brothers in the scene, which would explain the multiple shots...

[MisterOwl]

Thank you all for so many great complements and comments. I didn't realize so many were interested in the comic.

Here are some quick links to the previous pages:

Pg 1: http://www.geocities.com/nmalara2000/pg1new.jpg
Pg 2: http://www.geocities.com/nmalara2000/pg2.jpg
Pg 3: http://www.geocities.com/nmalara2000/pg03.jpg

To Matt E.:
Thank you for your analysis. You're right about the little disscrepencies in the image's consistancy. The second panel has always bothered me, but I needed to move on and couldn't make the necessary changes to make it better. I guess I tried to sneek-by with his leg. The gun fire was intentionally made to be ridiculously unrealistic in terms of the weapon's amunition capacity. I was thinking "Tom and Jerry" shot gun. Haveing gun fire in the last panel didn't occur to me, but I think you are right about it sort of dissrupting the flow.

To Opticallillusion:

The two pictures are the same guy, they're aren't any brothers, but including some indication of the "CO-OP" symbol on his hat in the second panel would have cleared that up. Sorry, and thanks for bringing it to my attention.

I have been taking for granted how important progressive minute details within panels was essential for good story-telling. Thanks to all, and thanks for reading along!