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eddie
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 20, 2000 1:14 pm     Reply with quote
i started going to volunteer life drawing classes today..neat..

unfortunately the only sort of critique i received from the instructor was 'hey, that looks kinda cool..'

anyone care to critique? flame? tell me what i should work on to improve myself?





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CapnPyro
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 20, 2000 1:24 pm     Reply with quote
Hey, that looks kinda cool

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 20, 2000 1:31 pm     Reply with quote
Hey, that's kinda cool looking.
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Chapel
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 20, 2000 1:33 pm     Reply with quote
Cool.. kinda.

Why did you leave the faces off? The figures look very well done in my opinion.
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 20, 2000 1:33 pm     Reply with quote

The forms are very good, and the proportions are good, if not perfect.
I'm not sure what to critique, because figure drawings are sort of meant to just be practice.
If you were going to turn them into finished pieces, I would suggest a wider range of lights and darks, working into the shadows, and working with 'areas' of value (or color if you prefer) instead of line. The third one seems to have the best composition for a finished painting.
If you're not going for a painting, in your next batch of drawings I would work on varying line weight to show form, or going away from line towards areas of light and dark. Try out both. It's good practice.

Also, you avoided the face and head. That's no good - that's the hardest part!
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 4:17 am     Reply with quote
Looks good
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 7:13 am     Reply with quote
How can you sitt there and DRAW!!!..SHES A HOT!!!! DAMEN HOT!!!!...When I always see these life drawing the models are usualy not that hot..but this...SHES HOT!!..jeeezz..

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 8:03 am     Reply with quote
That looks ... kinda cool ..

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 2:20 pm     Reply with quote
In the first and third pictures the hands need some work, and in the second picture you just avoided it all together. So my verdict is: work on the hands. And nail the model.

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 4:07 pm     Reply with quote


overall I think they look very nice. Nice proportions and volume as well.
Techniquewise, they could need a bit more work. By that I mean that the pencil shadowing is a bit waste of time, since you haven't shaded so that it gives more shape to the character than that actually are in the linework. I don't know if you understand what I mean, but since the shading don't show much of the light direction or any inner shapes inside the lines, you could just as well used the time you spent on shading to work out a face, fingers, etc...

But, else from that, nice drawings

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 5:24 pm     Reply with quote
hey thats how my instructor critiques too.
"Thats hot man"

Eddie these are tight. Very volumetric. I don't wanna give any serious critique cuz i am grasshopping myself, but lightning looks a lil bit strange in some places. I am having almost the same problem, trying right now to get the shape divided into shade and light and then work from there (attempting to copy fred ).
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2000 9:30 pm     Reply with quote
akira she might be hot but did you wonder why she has no face ?!?!?! =)
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