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nova · Posted: Fri Aug 25, 2000 11:31 pm

eh,

the following image is at your disposal for tearing apart, pulverizing, atomizing, etc etc.. the torso looks funny to me. i need a fresh mind to look at this and possibly help me out. for those inquiring, this is an image of a character named Shayna for an RPG i'll be playing. long story, but she has mech wings (the long, angled strokes in the background).

shoot!

if that doesn't work, try here

thanks again,

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[This message has been edited by Nova (edited August 26, 2000).]

X-pLaGue · member Member # Joined: 01 May 2000 Posts: 117

Her right arm is a bit off. I don't really know how to phrase this.. but i'll try my best anyway.

The forearm should overlay the 'back'arm at the connection of 'both' arms. You should draw the elbow joint together with the forearm. *ps: i'm talkin abt the rite arm here!*

y'know what I'm talking? Sheesh. Never mind. I hope someone else spot it and they might be able to explain it to ya better.

I also noticed that her right shoulder is bigger than the left, you should shrink it and shift it closer to the head.

1 more thing, maybe you don't really like it but.. try to exaggerate the boobs a little, I think it will look nicer that way.

Anyway, nice pose, nice hair and nice eyes!!

keep up e good work!

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Guy · Posted: Fri Aug 25, 2000 11:55 pm

nice drawing so far.
the first thing i notice about the waist is that it seems to wide OR its not big enough. also doesnt seem to have much of a crotch area hehe. her pants also seem really low too.

i dont know if that really help at all, but it looks really good so far

X-plague: personaly i like the breasts way they are, but that just me i guess. i dont think they need to be larger

[This message has been edited by Guy (edited August 26, 2000).]

n8 · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2000 12:01 am

hey... captured an innocent lookin face thingie!!...ive been tryin to do that for ages!!...nywho..i cant say much bout it...i like =)

sh4de · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2000 2:01 am

/me likes this one alot =)

I think all the things that I was going to say about this one have been said already.
..so my message is again total waste of time.

micke · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2000 3:55 am

Very nice sketch

I don't see any big mistakes..Maybe she is a little bit too thin?

-Micke

Fred Flick Stone · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2000 8:05 pm

Nova, hope you don't mind me sketching this. I like the image. In fact, yours has a sweeter face than mine, but I am not too sure about your torso. I lowered the camera in mine so it would be a bit closer to the subject, a bit more intimate if you will. I also finished the pose off so I dont have any tangencies once I crop the image in a bit. Hope this helps you out a bit...I love your face, very sweet...

Fred Flick Stone · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2000 8:06 pm

I just now read the part about the mech wings, oops, forgot em...

Krztfr · junior member Member # Joined: 27 Aug 2000 Posts: 13

Hey. This is my first time here.

Looks great. One thing that i noticed is that she is really leaning forward. This might result in a few more creases in the lower portion of her shirt. Also her upper right thigh seems a bit skinny. It could possibly use a bit of widening at he top (Where it atteches to her). Also one more thing. The way the shirt lays on her leg seems a bit wrong. It should curve with the leg. If you can see what im getting at.

Hehe. Hope ive been helpfull.

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