[proximo]

Well loki one more to go! and ill have 2 eheh well again did this at work .. like i said still trying to nail the style .. im getting closer... tell me what you think .. im going to reline it .. so ill post it when im dont .. tell me what you think ..

[Loki]

Hey - much better! The basic design looks much better IMHO. Looks meaner too! Harhar!
Maybe the engine in the rear aticks out a little bit too far?

What I'd do now is connecting the parts a little bit more to each other, so you get a flow going ...

But - since I'm not a concept artist, take my comments with a grain of salt ... maybe the crazy dudes from San Diego can give you some pointers ... they rule with stuff like that!

Rock on!

[psi burn]

looks pretty good, although it doesnt look very airborne :] it resembles the look of a spaceship you'd build in a lego set, where everything has a very nice neatness to it but is very crammed together

[proximo]

first off im going to be cleaning it up so hopfuly it should read better, i was going for more of a cramed in look to it , kind of like they wanted to put lots of crap on a smaller ship in a way.

Loki, yah in the clean up i think the stuff should .. or i hope will peace togather better.. and what people from san diago eheeh .. id like some pointers ehehe

psi- what do you think i used as ref! LEGO! eheh no j/k but i see were your comming from.. i just dont want to make it too bubbly you know .. any how more coments and crits welcome.. late,,

[Rinaldo]

Looking pretty cool.

There is however not enough contrast in form or line weight. If you have a look at the space ship concepts people like Vortx do there is a lot of contrast in the forms. Little bits of machinery balanced with big ones. It is important to use a variety of line widths when drawing most things it helps do define form and volume. the contrast should be apparant in every area. use different shapes, etc make sure that your blacks and whites (I should say lights and darks) are balancing out through contrast. If you don't have the contrast then the viewer is going to get bored, because everything is the same.


I hope this has helped more that hindered

[proximo]

Rinaldo- thanks for the feed back , i can see what you are saying and i really appreciate the feed back , im going to like i said reline it and add some of the stuff you were talking about, as far as moving parts and what not ,, thiker, thiner lines and what not, then ill post again to ask for all of your assistance in what the hell is wrong with it eheeh .. thanks again guys..

[Mergatroid]

I think you should watch your elipses. The engine in the back looks funny cause the ellipse looks like it has a bit of a corner to it. Size relationships within the overall shape of the ship could also stand to very alittle. The one part I am having trouble with though is on the size relationship between the ship and lets say a person. If you were to draw a person next to it how big would it be? Is this a one person ship or does it have a larger crew? You might also want to put a dark rectangular box behind the ship too to help it pop. Anyway, keep up the good work!


Late,


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Mergatroid