[Moose]

I did this piece for a class at school, i didnt get much responce from the other classmates or prof, so i shall post it here....
It is a compostited image, 6 total. Let me know what you think of the message and anything else.



there are others like this on my site, so if you are bored, swing on by there and check it out. feel free to crit anything there too

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Moose
http://www.geocities.com/mountainiii
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[Ctrl+Z]

at the bottom you should put 'lets stop this crap!!!' I think it would get the point across. i like them very much!!!

Ctrl+Z production

[CapnPyro]

damn thats powerful, great composition. nifty photoshop effects

-CapnPyro-

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[klaivu]

Maybe those kids got their urge to kill people from roleplaying and computer games ?

[Affected]

The rest of it is indeed powerful, butt he kids don't look that good... I think it's the scanlining and the glow that makes them look a little cheap.


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Affected

Democracy is a lie

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[immi]

i think its too colorful. its kind of hard to focus on one area and i agree that the kids don't look great. i think it would be more powerful if you went with simpler colours. I just fiddled around for about 5 minutes, and this is what i came up with. Yeah, it sucks, but i think if you played around with the concept, it would make your image better.




[This message has been edited by immi (edited May 25, 2000).]

[Nex]

great work, but i agree, the colors are a bit distracting. I think the text and picture is enough to get the point, no need to add additional text I think.

[Moose]

Thanks everyone for you comments...they were hella more productive than what i got from my classmates.

affected and immi: the reason the kids look "scanlined" is because i wanted them to appear asif they were on television - what i feel the the influence for their violence. After i take it out of the catacombs of my jaz disk, i do agree tha they look a little shotty, but not b/c of the scan lines b/c they dont have bodies. Yeah, and the glow just seemed like a thing to do to make them seem like they were from a television.

immi: i never thought about the colors being too distracting until you mentioned it. I agree, it would be more powerful with simpler colors. That color you changed it to is killer! Niice, i like that!

i dont know what color i shall move to, maybe duotone.....arg i dont know. im gonna have to sit and screw with it.

Thanks again for your comments

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Moose
http://www.geocities.com/mountainiii
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[Jet-Poop]

really, i prefer the original colors for something like this...the overbright colors kind of emphasize the irony of the picture, and the fact that on the whole it takes on a red white and blue color scheme adds another layer of meaning to it. some of that was probably unintentional, but accidents are where a lot of my best work comes from.

maybe if you could make the sky a little more white, with blue/black in the dark areas of it (general dodged up blue color to the whole thing), i think that might make it look a little more like the social-critique/punkrock-angry sort of piece that i think you're looking for.

i don't know what to tell you about the kids. personally i think the kid images are a little too straightforward. don't beat your audience with a sledgehammer, make them think a little bit.

I might also lose the text, and let the image stand on it's own. no hand-holding. that's kind of like a comedian explaining why his jokes are supposed to be funny.

maybe a baby in a crib w/gun? or a kid with a lunchbox and one behind him holding a rifle case or something? i don't know, this is all just spur of the moment stuff.

i don't know if that helps any or not...nice image.

-pewp

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"Trumpy, you can do stupid things!"

[This message has been edited by Jet-Poop (edited May 26, 2000).]