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Luvboat
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:11 pm     Reply with quote
k, this image involved me making a weird face in the mirror and drawing it; from start to finish it took about 3 hours.

tell me whatcha think

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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:20 pm     Reply with quote
PeeWee Herman?
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Luvboat
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:29 pm     Reply with quote
was peewee herman asian? :/
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:38 pm     Reply with quote
I know you are but what am I?

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Luvboat
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:43 pm     Reply with quote
lol, okay besides the fact that i made myself look like peewee herman in this pic, what about the proportions/coloring etc?

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Leon
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 2:50 pm     Reply with quote
The top half of the face doesn't look like it belongs with the bottom-half. The perspective isn't consistive.
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 5:05 pm     Reply with quote
WEll HERE it goes ..
I think you need some contrast here it all looks flat because you have no contrast . PeeWee needs some shadows and highlights , the eyes for example look like you put alot into them .. they look really good but the rest needs some life into it.
The perspective is definitely off for everything below the eyes . It seems like your Pose might have changed at different stages of sketching this .. so thats the problem with that ..
well thats about all I can point out ..

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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 6:14 pm     Reply with quote
Well the top of the head is to high in my opinion, balled or not(?) it still makes him like like one of those cartoon genius's with the big brains.
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Mozeman
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 7:29 pm     Reply with quote
It's hard to say how off the structure is, maybe your head is really shaped like that

Aciddrone, "balled?" This is no place for that type of language.

Luvboat is obviously a loner, Dottie. A rebel.

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Luvboat
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 8:08 pm     Reply with quote
bald? not hardly, i have a shaved head, i guess i did the view wrong but i was leaning my head up in the picture

mozeman: what are you talking about? im obviously a 'loner'? a 'rebel'?

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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 10:01 pm     Reply with quote
It's a line from Pee Wee's Big Adventure.

Seriously, the roughness of the proportions might be more forgivable in a rough pencil sketch or painted sketch. But this image seems more refined, so the proportions seem all out of kilter because it looks like you spent time getting the color right, but not the drawing itself.

And it's not stylized enough for the misproportions to be "artsy," ala Picasso.

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lotor
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 10:50 pm     Reply with quote
"The stars at night are big and bright"
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 11:09 pm     Reply with quote
Deep inna heart of TEXAS! *clap clap clap clap*

Sorry. Couldn't resist.....

Lemur-X : Doesn't make monkeys, he only trains them.

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lotor
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2000 11:23 pm     Reply with quote
Put some more colors into the face. It all seems to be one color. Also I don't like the flat background.
...darken the ear and the whole side of the face. You've probaably drawn and shaded a ball before...well this is the same thing. The head is round like a ball, so shade it like one. Then add in the shadows of the nose and mouth. Just make sure your light source remains consistant.
...Sorry about all the Pee Wee jokes this forum as well as myself just can't keep from taking a joke and running wild with it.
...Go out and buy (unless you have it) the Bridgman books on drawing and anatomy.
...Also what I think would help you even more is to just draw you own mug from about 20 or 30 different angles a day. Those are quick sketches no scanning and painting. Just till you can draw the head from any angle. You gotta do what you gotta do to be good at drawing.
...Fill those sketchbooks with drawings. The computer will follow.
Hope I helped
ciao
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PostPosted: Wed May 17, 2000 10:02 am     Reply with quote
"Good morning, Peewee."
"GOOD MORNING MR. BREAKFAST!"
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