[ax--hv]

...of the ocean, what did you think blood thirsty?

[Odds]

completely fantastic! .. well, i think the figure should be left out, personally. it sorta removes the serenity to the scene. the water is stunning. keep it up!

[Petri.J]

I think that you have come a long way down. I think that every work that I've seen from you is better than this. If you want me to do critics, ask for it because it's a long list
I'm sorry for me being so honoust and straight forward.

[ax--hv]

Odds, thanks man!

Petri.J, sure please explain! I couldn't be more confused... opinions are simply opposite, no pattern at all One guy even said that the figure is the best part
HELP

[Matthew]

Since you asked me about edges earlier ax--hv I thought I could try out with an overpaint too, I hope you do not mind.

First of all I think with the edges in your piece is that there is attention all over the piece making the eye roll all over the place, however, many interesting parts is in there but with them put together it becomes a bit difficult to read. Some other things to think of too but I will stick to the edges, hope it shows in the overpaint.

as an anecdote, I remember many years ago when I was sailing with my older sister and her husband. It was a sunny day but all of a sudden there was dark clouds in the horizon and the bad weather did hit us in a split of a second, it was crazy and it was like in your pic with a dark stream close to the horizon but above nice and sunny and then came darkness and it was raining cats and dogs, hehe had to hide indoors of the boat.



maybe a cup of tea would be nice right about now
see you and keep it up ax--hv
Matthew

[watmough]

couldnt disagree more with Petrij here.....
i think this is a fine painting,ax--hv,the only thing that stands out to me is the saturation...abit too much to read quite right...also the blues were too magenta-shifted.

[tttia]

the figure seems too smooth for the rest of the piece. There also appears to be more detail on the water, etc. than on the figure, and even on into the background. There are more shades given to the sand as well, and only a few on the character. Given that the figure is more to the foreground this seems to bring the background into focus rather than the figure which just doesn't seem like it belongs. I think if the figure were more refined, and in the rougher style of the piece, it would work.

Right now in my view everything from the dark part of the clouds down in the background is fantastic. But the upper clouds and the figure just seem too rounded, too plain, they are just not developed to the level of the rest of the piece.


The picturesque qualities are good. A fine moment.

[ax--hv]

Matthew and Watmough, thank you very much guys!

Overpaint looks great Matthew, I like how smooth it is
Watmough obviously an eyeopener to me, looks much better!

I'll try to get rid of my maximalistic bents

Tttia, thank you for the comment! I guess the figure looks different because it's done in different technique. Looks quite realistic to me in some way

[Mikko K]

Looks good Alexey,

One thing comes to mind. The figure seems to be lit with a spot from behind, so that the edges get quite dark. Maybe some indirect bounce light there (light bouncing from the sand etc.) could help. And maybe stress the situation that the light is coming from the sky, so that the up-facing planes of shoulders and hair should catch some more light when compared to the back of the character. Anyways, you know these things better than me, so I might just shut up

btw. Are you back in school now?

[ax--hv]

Thanks Mikko!

I see what you mean, tricky question The more I tried to light something perfectly, the more artifical it looked. So I decided to limit myself on the lightness of non-direct sources and it helped! I guess I overrated the volume of reflected light before. And it's possible that now I underestimate it - your remark sounds reasonable to me

[kimchi]

Don't sweat Petri. Just look at his body of work and his comments are instantly discredited.

[Affected]

I really like the glow of the sand, but the figure and clouds don't measure up... The cloudsfeel like they need to be rendered more with an eye for the larger shapes, and less for detail somehow. And the figure does look like it's lit by a camera's flash, for example. The lighter colours seem too dull compared to the darker skin tones.

[buzzz3d]

Hi ax--hv,

First of all I like the image and the majority of your work a lot.

Then the comments, other than what has already been said about the saturation and the larger shape of the clouds what stould out for me when I first saw the image was that the figure looked huge for some reason.
Also, the figure hardly casts a shadow which makes him float a little.
Other than that, great work.

I also like Matthews overpaint by the way.

[Guest]

wow
it's very cool and i like the feelings in it
i only wonder hwo we see a storm on the clouds with no effect on the figure(his hair or cloths aren't moving at all)

[Mega Muffin]

[ax--hv]

Thanks for comments guys!

NewEra, I know only one way to add movement to jpeg - drugs :)
..but you are right movement is hard for me.

Actually I'm still eagerly waiting for Petri to explain his opinion. It would really help to find weak points.

[CwStone]

its awesome but shouldnt he have some edge lighting on his head/shoulder area fom the break in the clouds?
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