Sijun Forums :: View topic - "The Journeyman" (Critics warmly welcomed)

Andy0908 · junior member Member # Joined: 08 Sep 2004 Posts: 6

Hey folks!

I'd like to ask any of you with an opinion to give to take a few moments to share some critisism, suggestions, anything of the sort on my latest attempt at drawing in Paint Shop Pro 8. While I can physically see improvements in my drawings with each attempt, my friends and family just don't quite have what it takes to give me their honest opinion, they're just too darn polite... I know I could be better at this is I were to recieve some good, honest views.

Rip it apart, tell me everything that looks odd, and I'll even throw in the earlier manifestations of the drawing to give you somethings to laugh at Laughing

Earlier versions can be viewed here...

http://www.jerhyn.com/serothyn/a1.jpg
http://www.jerhyn.com/serothyn/a2.jpg
http://www.jerhyn.com/serothyn/a3.jpg
http://www.jerhyn.com/serothyn/a5.jpg

Cheers in advance for any feedback you can give!

-Andrew

faB · Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2004 7:56 pm

Judging by the way you lit the character, the colors you used and the image as a whole I'd say you are doing well enough with colour and value at this point, and you should work on improving your knowledge of the anatomy if you want to draw from the mind. Also try to work on your sense of space in the image. Dont hesitate to paint from life to assemble your image, for example using a mirror you could do some sketches of your hands or friends or family's hands , and even get your friends/family to pose like your character and sketch em, see, make them useful that way Smile

Search the web for the 7.5/ 8 heads proportions, or use the cranial index:
http://www.tsofa.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=25

PS: by space I meant being aware of the horizon line as you draw your character, this helped me a great deal with adding depth to character sketches. See "Andrew Loomis 's Figure Drawing for all It's worth" (search forum you ll find a downlad link eventually, its free).
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weaselball2 · member Member # Joined: 15 Jun 2004 Posts: 101

try to make the hair look like its made of strands, right now it kinda looks like plastic

try sharpening up the edges too, they all got a little blur to them

I have trouble getting crits from my family as well Smile

. They don't wanna hurt your feelings so they wont say nothin bad Rolling Eyes

BSL · junior member Member # Joined: 30 Oct 2004 Posts: 2

The fingers are slightly too short I think. Just a thought, the hair should be more strand link as the previous posrt mentioned.

The rest is great, I love the deep thought expression on the face.
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Andy0908 · junior member Member # Joined: 08 Sep 2004 Posts: 6

Thanks for the help so far! I've managed to fix the hand, I think, and the hair is improving (though perhaps not perfect yet...) I've also begun work on sharpening up some of the edges.

More Crits welcome,

-Andrew