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PuC
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I did this for school, its my second try at making something in photoshop,
hope you like it:
maybe you could give me some tips?
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| Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2004 5:05 pm |
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it looks like you cut and pasted a desert eagle into the drawings (am I right?) There's nothing totally wrong with doing something like that, but it kinda throws the rest of the work off balance. Your style is sort of abstract as well as black and white, so putting in a crisp, blue-tinted desert eagle is incongruent with the rest of the work... You might want to actually try and draw the weapon in order to create something a little more homogeneous.
If you've got a picture of a desert eagle (not hard to find), you can look at the points that stand out the most about it and try and draw one of your own 
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| Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2004 11:16 pm |
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| pretty cool, I like the way it ended. It looks like its still in the concept phase, you should make a more polished version (but keep it stylized). The one problem I had was that its difficult to figure out which order to read the text, usually in comics you read left to right and it can be very confusing when you break from that. |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2004 6:40 am |
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| Heysoos wrote: |
| pretty cool, I like the way it ended. It looks like its still in the concept phase, you should make a more polished version (but keep it stylized). The one problem I had was that its difficult to figure out which order to read the text, usually in comics you read left to right and it can be very confusing when you break from that. |
I agree with not being able to really know how to read the text, although I do think it doesn't really matter where you start reading.
Some lines just make sense in some set following order, but most of the text can be read whenever you feel like it. The message reaches you in the end, and that's what counts. IMHO...
I also like the style, especially the sketchy, dirty look of it. It suits the story, and the characters.
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tsunami
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| Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2004 8:43 am |
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Excellent concept work, reminds me of max payne cutscenes..It does sorta have an absstract feel to it but thats good, it adds to the atmostphere you created with the story.
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PuC
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| Posted: Mon Apr 05, 2004 1:07 am |
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Thanks for the comments people, I thought it was pretty much finished but now I think theres still some things I could do with it.
I'm afraid it wont get past this stage for a while though, I worked on it for about 24 hours straight, and now I'm pretty tired of it.
Yeah the desert eagle is pasted, and I guess it could be improved to fit more with the rest. But I just need some seriouse gun studies before i can draw a gun that seems realistic enough to put it in this comic.
I think I'll tweak the text boxes when I get back to work on it, maybe make them a bit smaller.
One question though; what does IMHO mean?
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| Posted: Mon Apr 05, 2004 2:09 am |
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nice comic...
IMHO = In My Honest Opinion |
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