[acrylic]

just finished this stuff which i started end of last year. Take me quite long to make this happen. Took a bit of time out everyday for this stuff.

Need some suggestion from you guys:

Does it need coloring?
or this will be fine.

thank you for ur time spend here.



here is the first page:




the rest is here:
http://www.geocities.com/refreshingmind/comic/bw_2.txt

http://www.geocities.com/refreshingmind/comic/bw_3.txt

http://www.geocities.com/refreshingmind/comic/bw_4.txt

http://www.geocities.com/refreshingmind/comic/bw_5.txt

http://www.geocities.com/refreshingmind/comic/bw_6.txt

[ColdKodiak]

mmm... I like the story.

Here's the thing... I'm guessing English isn't your first language. And even if it is, I'd suggest getting someone else to rewrite the dialogue so it actually flows.

2nd, I love the illustrations. Very nice. Um, I have one problem with page six... I think frame 2 is hard to read that is goes before frame 3. I moved to 3 first when I read it. You might want to do whatever to fix that.
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[acrylic]

man you r right i'll change that as soon as possible. thanks for pointing out that. You saved the flow.COuldn't agree with you more.

English is bad, gotta fix that too, poor me.