[dontfallin]

not sure why Im bothering

[Simoom]

The first thing that stands out to me is that the eyeballs are absolutely enormous. however, looking at all of the pictures i'm guessing this is a purposeful choice on your part, so i won't question it.

Other than some anatomical quirks, like the eyes and the last girl being too skinny, my main suggestion is on the last two. You left in your outlining, which ordinarily isn't necessarily a bad thing. But i can see that you drew and redrew the outlines over eachother, giving it a very fuzzy and unconfident feel. Try using fewer and more confident strokes, it tends to make things much smoother and more natural feeling. It'll obviously take some practice, but it can help out a lot.

[dontfallin]

the outlines over each other is just a bad habit Ive gotten into that Im trying to break, thanks for you comments I really appreciate them