[Citizen Kane]

Ok, I didn't want to detail this one much, and I wanted the shapes to be recognizable from far away, so I didn't want to over detail it. Feel free to tell me what to improve. I think I'm 75% done, all I need is some critiques.

http://www.deviantart.com/view/4469348/

;D Thx.

[Citizen Kane]

Sorry, didn't mean to double post, delete this one please.

[BlueJoker]

Hi Kane,
there is a huge amount of detail on the left/upper corner but the opposit site is dominated by these fleeing clothes, legs and the sword, which topple the whole picture to the right. The green glowing ball in the lower/right corner has to hold all this movement. This is a composition problem, take a look here:

http://www.aksityayincilik.com/images3/mitoloji/laokon.jpg

The central character ( Laokoon ) has a similar movement but still the whole sculpture is settled. Try to give your characters more weight and a clear defined location. OK these are ghostlike creatures not mountain giants, but if done carefully you can win expression with it AND these stronger figures would also hold against the above mentioned toppling.

On the other hand, your colors are all in a very equal grey/brown spectrum.
Try to add contrast to the foreground by adding some highlights and brighter colors. Darken the back to get the background/foreground relation right.
A Masterpiece for this technic is here:

http://www.uwrf.edu/history/images/a212/caravaggio-paul.jpg

Look how the second guy behind the horse is vanishing into the dark while the one the ground is, only by the light, strong enough to hold the horse.

Hope i was not too harsh , have a nice weekend

Blue