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Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Ok so I'm doing a comic for my school newspaper. Please, I ask for help on it. I know it's not terribly clean, at all. And the dog looks a little strange. I don't have much experience with comics..and it's due Monday, so if you guys could post comments, crit, and help I'd be soo appreaciative. Thanks, and withough further adeu....

Al Ian · Posted: Sat Nov 22, 2003 9:12 am

What are you looking for help with?
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Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Well, is it funny, for starters. And like I said, I really don't have experience in making comics, so I don't really know...

faeklone · Posted: Sun Nov 23, 2003 11:50 pm

I'm kind of a little late, but my favorite comic strip artist is Frank Cho who does the strip Liberty Meadows. Personally I like his style, both artistic and crude jokes. It also helps you to see the way he presents his case and sets up a punch line. Personally I found your strip haha, funny after I realized what happened.

And that's roughly about how I find most of the strips out there nowadays. You can't tell a decent joke when the paper believes that chilren are reading that section, and you have pictures of scantily clad women in the classified section, and even pinups in some papers. And on the front page it's about several people dead in the middle east or some other horror. The length people will go to delude themselves.

Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Ok, well the newspaper didn't use it. Sad

oh well....my school newspaper sucks anyways (and I'm not just saying that out of spite, it really does). Also, I've decided not to give up. Here is my latest attempt, hope u like it! C&C appreciated.

Alucard · Posted: Sun Dec 14, 2003 9:00 am

I think I saw it in another topic Idea

Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Yeah but this one is black and white, and I made the lines thicker.

Alucard · Posted: Sun Dec 14, 2003 10:57 am

dfacto · Posted: Sun Dec 14, 2003 11:06 am

OK, I ever since I first saw your muffin things, I have wanted to say that you should just try harder. Your art is sloppy, plain and simple. You need to clean up your art, and make it neat. There are comic styles that use messyness, but they look purposefully messy, while your look just plain "I didn't put enough time into this" messy. I also think that you should try altering your line weight to add more feel to the work. Here is an example of something I did today for the DSG on Conceptart.org.

btw, nobody crit this, I don't want to be a thread jacker.

Not only does it look clean, for the most part, but the line width is varied, giving it more appeal, and making it much more interesting. It also has a unique (OK probably not) style that can definetly be pinned down as comic. Your style needs some refinement. Take a sheet of paper, and just start drawing like crazy. Try to vary every sketch from the last one to make it more appealing to you and your firends (ask them). Eventually something should emerge.

Sorry if this isn't what you want to hear, but I think that it would help if you followed at least some of what I said above. Your comics have potential, but they need a lot of refinement.
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Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Thanks dfacto, I appreciate your comments. I guess ur right about me just not spending enough time on it, because I really didn't. I'll work on it more for sure, and I'll try varying the line thickness, and making it look cleaner. It's just really annoying trying to make a straight line, or even a line exactly how I want it, so I don't bother.

Thanks, again, I'll work on it and update.

dfacto · Posted: Sun Dec 14, 2003 3:00 pm

Do you do this on a tablet? Because that would explain the sloppy line work. Try doing it on paper and scanning it after inking. It lets you make the lines much better. I did that cartoon hobbit on printer paper, and then inked him with a sharpie and a uni-ball pen. I scanned him, and cleaned up the lines in photoshop and then colored him with my tablet. The result is better that way. Tablets do not match paper work in general, that being why most people use the pen tool to ink in photoshop anyway, instead of just freehanding it.
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Mega Muffin · member Member # Joined: 07 Oct 2003 Posts: 235

Yeah, I don't have a scanner (well, I'm not sure if i do anymore, i think it just doesn't work). I did it on a tablet. Maybe I'll try working on paper, and see how that goes.