Sijun Forums :: View topic - A few comments please?! (Updated)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Citizen Kane · junior member Member # Joined: 15 Sep 2003 Posts: 39

I needed some comments on this pic, as I can't really find the right mood and lighting for it. I would love some feedback.
http://www.deviantart.com/view/3153436/

Freddio · Posted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 1:46 am

an eery picture there, You need to get your light source worked out, at the moment all im seeing is midtones. Once you have this you can work up the contrast and play around with the mood. Also try and sharpen up the forground and leave the background just to add to the sense of depth.

the picture has potential, keep at it mate Smile

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Citizen Kane · junior member Member # Joined: 15 Sep 2003 Posts: 39

K, I'll establish my lightsource, then show it.

Cadence · junior member Member # Joined: 23 Sep 2003 Posts: 26

Hello there, nice picture and concept. It's looking a bit blurry right now though, so I suggest refining it a bit by using small brushes and basically sharpen up everything.
Also, is it only me or do I see a little perspective problem?? I took the liberty of doing a small paintover to explain what I mean..

I had to crop it a little because of bandwidth issues Confused

Anyways..
The two 'bridge walls', if taken furthere back, meet at a point called the vanishing point. Now, the vanishing point lies on the horizon line, which means that the sea horizon should lie on that line (the pink one), not further up as you depicted it. Hope I'm not wrong here, but I think not.
Anyways, keep it up ey!

Citizen Kane · junior member Member # Joined: 15 Sep 2003 Posts: 39

http://www.deviantart.com/view/3197456/
Here's an updated copy with lighting, etc. I think I'm close to done, and what do you think!